Wikipedia:Peer review/Dartford/archive1

Dartford

For a town of its size and importance, I think we have a high-quality article here, however I also feel there are some things missing, but I can't quite put my finger on them. Any comments from the wikipedia community would be gratefully received. Jdcooper 23:13, 17 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Well the priority for this article is expansion. It should be compared to featured article Bath. A broadlost of things missing:

Good lead. See WP:LEAD.
Geography section discussing umm let me see: geography. + climate and weather.
Politics sections.
Culture section.

Current issues:

two line sections need to be expand. On the other hand, alot of expansion on everything is needed.
If there is nothing you can add to the History section, then get rid of the sub-sections. Sub-sections like that are used for large amounts of information.
"Communications" section renamed to "Transport".
Population needs to be merged into "Demographics" and the section expanded respectively.
Include notable places.
Notable people should be on of the last things on the page.
Dont forget good references.

Thanks! - Tutmosis 23:57, 17 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much! We will get right on that, cheers Jdcooper 11:40, 18 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I have had a shot at the "Notable people" section, making it less wordy. I am also trying to set up a more comprehensive lead para - will be grateful for comments when it appears; and unless anyone else wishes to undertake it, the History section. I think that some of that could perhaps be included in a para entitled "Industrial history" since there are some good sections which would read better together. Peter Shearan (talk) 16:48, 21 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

There is a fairly comprehensive history here by Mark Chatwin, by way of extra sources, although there are possible accuracy issues with it (see discussion ici). Jdcooper (talk) 17:20, 21 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I have had a comprehensive attempt at this article. Although I am sure there is much to be added, I will now leave it to simmer, so that any additional info will not come from me for the time being. I am now looking at the Dartford (borough) article which cannot make up its mind whether it is talking about the town or the borough! IMO we sould take the built-up area of Dartford as "town" and all the rest - the Borough Council, MP, parishes, etc etc - as the borough. It is a pity that the ancient meaning of the word "borough" has come to mean that much wider area - it is even more ridiculous in the case of eg Canterbury where its rural areas are still called the "city"! - the actual local government areas were all called "districts" but local government officials didn't want to lose the word borough where there was a mayor involved Peter Shearan (talk) 11:02, 29 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]