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Dream of the Red Chamber[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because I am not a native English speaker and I think I made bad translations in section #Homophones. I want to make sure there is no mistake.
Thanks, Matthew 百家姓之四 Discussion 討論 12:42, 27 May 2009 (UTC)
Comments by Ricardiana
Done
- The article talks a lot about homophones, not just in the homophone section but elswhere also. You should include pinyin as well as characters so that people who don't know Chinese can understand these better.
- The article needs a thorough copy-edit. One problem that comes up often is changes in verb tense.
- I will try to do some editing myself (you should check all my edits to make sure that I didn't change the meaning of anything). However, there are some sentences I don't understand and therefore can't change. For example:
- "The novel, published up till the 20th century, was anonymous". Does this mean the novel is not published anymore? Or does it mean that the novel was published anonymously until the 20th century and now it is published under Cao's name?
- "The Stone and Divine Attendant-in-Waiting (神瑛侍者) are separate while related (while in Chenggao versions they are merged)". What does "separate while related" mean? Related like relatives? What does merged mean - are they the same character in the Chenggao version?
- Many paragraphs lack citations. Every paragraph (except in the lead) should have a citation. I notice there's been some controversy on the discussion page due to the lack of citations. This is the most important thing you should work on.
- Some of the paragraphs are very short - only one or two sentences. Try combining the very short paragraphs into longer ones.
- The references section should include more information - year published, publisher, etc.
Ricardiana (talk) 18:33, 28 May 2009 (UTC)