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Dryandra Woodland

I've spent a fair bit of time on this and have hit a wall as to what else is needed to improve it further. I think the prose and layout are good and its got nice images. ANY feedback is welcome. Thanks. —Moondyne 00:24, 2 February 2007 (UTC)

Cyrus Sixguns

Threatened fauna are listed; how about any threatened flora? Chris 04:07, 2 February 2007 (UTC)

I added a table of declared 'rare' and 'priority species' as defined under the Wildlife Conservation Act. —Moondyne 05:58, 2 February 2007 (UTC)

Table updated as the source appeared to have been out of date. —Moondyne 04:34, 3 February 2007 (UTC)

Will.i.am

Just a quick mention that the footnotes should go after the punctuation in the sentence. I believe that all of the notes in the article are in front. (See WP:FOOT for details.)--Will.i.am 02:31, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

Thanks - another day that I learnt something new. Its changed. —Moondyne 07:00, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

• I read through the article, corrected some typos, and changed some phrases (very minor). But there were two others which I didn't attempt:

1. What does CALM stand for? The article should probably spell out the acronym in its first instance.
2. The first paragraph of the last section (Tourism) is a direct copy of one in the lead. My suggestion would be to keep the one in the article body, but to cut down the one in the lead significantly (effectively you just want to say something to why Dryandra is important and notable, but you can leave the details for down below). Good luck!--Will.i.am 00:59, 6 February 2007 (UTC)

Thanks. CALM meaning is now clarified and duplicate text in lead fixed. —Moondyne 01:34, 6 February 2007 (UTC)

Automated review by AndyZ

• Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 23:05, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Dupicated text in lead fixed
  • No infobox found
  • Units of measurement and number formatting is fixed
  • References moved to after the full stop
  • Copyedited to remove redundancies

Thanks —Moondyne 14:10, 7 February 2007 (UTC)

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Thanks for the suggestions. Suggested improvements have been addressed and I feel that the article meets all the criteria at WP:WIAGA, so I'm nominating it there. —Moondyne 14:40, 23 February 2007 (UTC)