Wikipedia:Peer review/Edmonton/archive2

Edmonton

Previous peer review

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I hope to eventually get this article up to FA status. This is the second peer review I have opened for this article, and i feel that i closed it to soon so i will leave this one open longer. Two other users that have also been improving the article are 117Avenue (talk · contribs) and Hwy43 (talk · contribs) Thanks, Kyle1278 02:17, 20 March 2010 (UTC)

Comments by Niagara

• Alt-text is needed.
• "The hadrosaur Edmontosaurus is named after the city." → Not mentioned anywhere else in the article (see WP:LEAD); also seems too specific of a detail for the lead.

Done

• "...the Calgary-Edmonton Corridor..." → an en dash is needed (Calgary–Edmonton)

Done

• I'd break up that paragraph below the climate data table. Moving info on Edmonton's latitude to the "Geography" section and incorporate the amount of sunshine into the "Climate" section.

Done

• Having the measure of precipitation in the climate data table is somewhat redundant as you already have measurement for rain and snow.

Done

I disagree, the monthly amounts are listed elsewhere. 117Avenue (talk) 04:03, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

• The first part of the "Politics" section seems somewhat more relevant to being in the "History" section.
• How is Edmonton represented in the government on the national level? The provincial level?

Working...

• There is "citation needed" tag that would have to be taken care of before going to FAC.
• The GDP, in the "Economy" section, is from 2007. Is it possible to update this?

If someone could help me with this one it would be greatly appreciated i am not the best withe economic stuff.Kyle1278 01:10, 28 March 2010 (UTC)

• "Edmonton's current poet laureate is Mr. Roland Pemberton a.k.a. Mr. Cadence Weapon." → Why is this important to the city? Important enough for its own section?

Done

• "...immediately ahead of Mississauga, Charlotte, Tijuana, and Calgary among cities..." → I'd mention where these are located if they are not in Alberta.

Done

• Are coordinates for CFB Edmonton necessary?

Done

• It might beneficially to make the "Religion" section a subsection of "Demographics", as the two are closely related.

Done

Hope this helps. A good model article for an FA you might to look at is Hamilton, Ontario. A copyedit would also be a good idea. You might want to consider reviewing an article in the backlog, which I found this article. ​​​​​​​​Niagara ​​^{Don't give up the ship} 23:49, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the suggestions. Kyle1278 02:07, 26 March 2010 (UTC)