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Empire of Atlantium

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I've listed this article for peer review because I think that it can achieve good, or even featured article status with some more improvement. I didn't want to nominate it yet for either status, I wanted to improve the chances of a promotion with this peer review. With a website complete with plenty of information and images; and with the Emperor being a Wikipedia editor (user:Gene Poole), I think this article could soon achieve either status.

WikiProject Micronations and its members would help with this (the Emperor is a member).

Thanks,

Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:47, 29 January 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Well, complete novice at micronations so thought I'd have a read and make some independent comments (with FA ultimately in mind)...

• Move citations per WP:CITE (where possible immediately after punctuation, certainly no spaces before them).

Done Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:38, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• 10 m² , 61 m² - don't link these, it's not necessary, but do {{convert}} it for imperial units, probably square feet. And convert 0.76 km² as well (probably to acres). And "350 kilometres " ought to be 350 km and use the template to convert to miles.

Done Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:38, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• Take care when wikilinking individual years, this should only be done when it enhances the understanding of the article (so Cruickshanks year of birth is probably irrelevant since you've already said he was a teenager).

Done Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:44, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• Why is "prime minister" in quotations? The actual post held needs explanation.

Done Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:44, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• "Damian Scott (1986–1988), and Kevin Fanucchi (1988–1990) also served as "prime ministers", but by 1990, when the original group members had graduated from university and moved to different locations, the group ceased to be active." - don't like the wikilinked years in parentheses, remove the links, remove the parentheses, improve the prose by expanding the sentences incorporating a description of their role. Oh, and which university? Is that where they met? Expand this as well.

I'll remove the links but why the brackets? Unless there is any large amount of information about each government then the brackets should stay. I'll see if I can find any other information. Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:46, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• Move [7], [12] to the other side of the punctuation (as per WP:CITE and my comment above).

Done Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:44, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• Aurora section is very short and probably needs either expansion or merging with another section.
• Ref [10] is oddly positioned, next to Poland. Is this the only country cited or would the ref be better placed at the end of the list?

Done Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:44, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• Is the currency linked to anything e.g. $AUS?

Done Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 19:44, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

• "Atlantium mints coins.[14]" - this isn't a sentence. In fact the sections on stamps, coins and notes could be expanded, more prose.
• Bibliography section is vast - are any of these tomes used to provide citations into the article? If so use {{Cite book}} to specify exactly what's used.

Most are just links to news articles from Atlantium's website. Onecanadasquarebishopsgate 16:51, 1 February 2008 (UTC)

That's about all I have for now. I feel it's a way of FA for the time being, I'm afraid, but dealing with some of my comments should iron out some of the most obvious issues. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:26, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

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