Wikipedia:Peer review/Eric A. Havelock/archive1
Eric A. Havelock[edit]
This is the most technical article I've ever written, perhaps too technical. It's been a challenge. There is very little biographical material available, and, as far as I've been able to find, no photographs (of Havelock himself, that is). Havelock's personal effects (including photos and, tantalizingly, an unfinished autobiography) are at the Yale archives, and I know from personal experience that what goes in there doesn't come out. Thus, this is all rather scholarly. However, I'm pleased with it and I'd like to submit it to be featured. I'm concerned that it's not clear enough or, perhaps, interesting enough for a reader not familiar with the relevant fields. I'd greatly appreciate any advice in making it more accessible, or, of course, anything else at all. Thanks! Chick Bowen 04:06, 25 February 2006 (UTC)
- Nice shiny, thorough article. Short-attention-spanned as I am, I think the lead and the omg pix need some work. First sentence seems a bit pedantic - I mean, it's not unusual for a modern academic to have taken posts in several different countries, is it? Then the summary of his work went right over my head, and even the last sentence on impact I had to read twice... For a biography of a C20 figure, it seems odd not having a picture of them - though I appreciate finding something (especially with an appropriate licence) can be far from easy. The article itself looks (to amateur I) like a good overview of his work, but is a bit light on anything outside that. --zippedmartin 09:03, 26 February 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks very much. You're quite right about the lead, and I'll work on that later today. I'm not sure what you meant by "omg pix" though--could you explain? I'd love to have a picture of Havelock--I honestly don't know of the existence of any except in the Yale archives. I do think I can drum up some more biographical information, at least about teaching and perhaps the Canadian political work. Thanks again. Chick Bowen 16:57, 26 February 2006 (UTC)
- I've done some work on the lead, but it's still rather awkward. I'll return to it tomorrow. Chick Bowen 02:05, 27 February 2006 (UTC)
- Ooo, that's much better. Giving the time division makes the thesis sentence make a lot more sense. The irc-style picture request was just to demonstrate the relative importance - if you can find a picture of 'im, great, but it's not the end of the world if it's not possible. --zippedmartin 05:42, 27 February 2006 (UTC)
- Ah, now I get it. See, that's the kind of thing that goes over my head. Thanks again. Chick Bowen 17:40, 27 February 2006 (UTC)
- I've done some work on the lead, but it's still rather awkward. I'll return to it tomorrow. Chick Bowen 02:05, 27 February 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks very much. You're quite right about the lead, and I'll work on that later today. I'm not sure what you meant by "omg pix" though--could you explain? I'd love to have a picture of Havelock--I honestly don't know of the existence of any except in the Yale archives. I do think I can drum up some more biographical information, at least about teaching and perhaps the Canadian political work. Thanks again. Chick Bowen 16:57, 26 February 2006 (UTC)