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Flag of Japan[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been a long time since the FAC for this article. I am still think the only problem with the article is a grammar check, but most of the other issues have been solved, such as translation or the placement of titles.

Thanks, User:Zscout370 (Return Fire) 06:31, 23 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • Per Wikipedia:Lead_section#Bold_title, do not link the bold text in the lead.
  • "However, historically, the sun has had a religious connotation in Japan, and the rising sun has had important symbolic meaning." Add an before "important".
  • "Even members of the same family, such as a son, father and a brother, had different flags to carry to battle." Even is POV.
  • "The Hinomaru was legally the national flag from..." How about: "The Hinomaru was the legal national flag from..."
  • "Sources differ on the degree to which the use of the Hinomaru flag was restricted, with some using the term 'banned'."-->"Sources differ on the degree to which the use of the Hinomaru flag was restricted; some use the term 'banned'."
  • "Teachers have gone so far as to bring brought criminal complaints against Tokyo Governor Shintaro Ishihara and senior officials for ordering teachers to honor the Hinomaru and Kimi ga Yo."
  • "The ratio, according to the proclamation, is going to be seven units high and ten units wide (7:10)." Wrong tense.
  • "Negative perception towards the Hinomaru still exist in former colonies of Japan and Okinawa." Still exists.
  • "In China and South Korea, both occupied by Japan during World War II, Japanese flags are burnt during protests against Japan's foreign policies or if a Japanese prime minister visits the Yasukuni Shrine in Tokyo." "are burnt"-->were burnt.
  • "Also, many bus companies have been operating buses with the flag attached on holidays, in part to inform passengers that it is a holiday." Need a source for this.
  • "A very well-known variant of the sun disc design is the sun disc with 16 red rays".
  • "While not an official national flag, the Z signal flag played a major role in Japanese naval history." "While"-->Although. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:21, 27 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

  • You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FLC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC. (Bear in mind that FAC and FLC might have differing requirements about where to put citations, but the reliability of sourcing should stay the same between the two processes.)
Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 13:42, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
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