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I've listed this article for peer review because the article has never been assessed and since it is as well developed as it is without assessment I would like to see how it can be developed further. Thanks, Jonjonjohny (talk) 15:07, 13 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • [a madness shared by two] Error: {{Lang-xx}}: conflicting: |links= and |link= (help) Jonjonjohny (talk) 18:59, 19 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It needs to be placed in the article. AJona1992 (talk) 19:01, 19 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The English meaning of Folie a Deux is in the article; it's in the lead and has an entire section in the body. I have no idea what lang-en is so ignore what I said if I'm going on about something different. Noreplyhaha (talk) 02:37, 20 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It wasn't there.  Fixed it Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 20:51, 23 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It actually was in the article's introduction but it belongs at the top anyway, proved with edit. Jonjonjohny (talk) 21:28, 23 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
All album/song articles not in English are asked to for translation. Secondly, does it state so in the article? If not, then it shouldn't be in the lead section per WP:LEAD. Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 21:58, 23 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Section 3 is titled "title and artwork" the first paragraph is about the naming of the album with an english translation. Jonjonjohny (talk) 11:39, 24 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement.

  • A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are many FAs on albums that seem like they would be good models.
  • Two dab links that will need to be fixed here
  • Three dead external links here - at FAC all the i's need to be dotted and all the t's crossed.
  • For most articles at FAC the most difficult criterion to meet is 1a, a professional level of English. This is decent, but there is some rough prose.
    • In the lead Wentz's lyrics were rarely autobiographical for the first time on a Fall Out Boy release, leading to a musical style change and resulting in a further musical departure from the band's previous albums. not sure how to fix this one...
    • collaborators? Aren't they usally called guest artists? And "in various tracks" adds little: For Folie à Deux, Fall Out Boy recruited several collaborators to participate in various tracks. Perhaps something like just For Folie à Deux, Fall Out Boy recruited several guest artists.
    • The conjunction "and" seems odd here - would "but" be better to show the contrast? it debuted well, but was not as successful as its predecessor? The album debuted at number eight on the US Billboard 200 chart and was less commercially successful than Infinity on High.
  • Provide context to the reader - Folie à Deux stands as the final Fall Out Boy studio album recorded before the band's [2009] hiatus. could use the year the hiatus began
  • I would somehow identify who Patrick is here Wentz explained that the process was the same as usual: "I'll go over to Patrick's house ...
  • At the same time, MOS says to use just the last name once a person has been introduced with their full name, so fix Pete Wentz was once again the primary lyricist of the band during the production of the album.
  • Avoid vague time terms like currently Wentz currently owns the original painting.[19] I would use As of YEAR... instead.

Avoid short (one or two sentence) paragaphs and sections as the interrupt the narrative flow.

  • Watch WP:OVERLINKing - Elvis Costello is linked three times, for example
  • Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:35, 8 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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