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Galveston Pirate SC

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I've listed this article for peer review because I created it back in June and have yet to get a full rating. All comments are greatly appreciated.

Thanks, Treyvo (talk) 05:46, 30 August 2010 (UTC)

I've given it a C. It's an ok article with no outstanding issues, but the simple lack of seasons, as it is a new club, is a handicap writing-wise. Cheers, ResMar 19:37, 4 September 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: The article is in such an early stage of development that it's hard to say much, but here are a few things to keep in mind as you proceed.

• A good rule of thumb for meeting the requirements of WP:V is to provide a source for every set of statistics, every claim that is apt to be questioned, every direct quote, and every paragraph. The first paragraph of the "History" section needs a source or sources, for example, and the Perkins quote in the "Change of ownership" section needs an in-line citation directly after the final quotation marks.

• Articles that have attained featured status are often worth looking at for ideas about how to develop an article. You'll find a list of sports articles at WP:FA#Sport and recreation.

• An image or images would be good. You can take your own and upload them, and there are other possibilities.

• Date ranges, page ranges, and scores take en dashes rather than hyphens. I ran a script to fix these, but you'll need to be aware of this as you add new scores.

• Head and subheads generally use a capital letter only on the first word and on proper nouns. Thus, "Preseason Bang" should be "Preseason bang", and "Change of Ownership" should be "Change of ownership".

• The Manual of Style encourages telegraphic heads and subheads and discourages the repetition in heads and subhead of important words that appear in the article title. Thus, "Top Five Galveston Pirate SC Matches at Kermit Courville Stadium" would be much better as "Top five home games".

• The Manual of Style advises against "trivia" sections, which attract more trivia. If something in this section is important, try to include it in one of the other sections as you go along. If something in this section is truly trivial, delete it, and delete the section.

• WP:MOSBOLD suggest using italics for emphasis, if necessary, rather than bolding, which is reserved for special use. I don't think you need bolding or italics for any of the information under the "Team officials" head, which is automatically bolded. I would also advise using italics sparingly. The more you use them, the less impact they have.

• The date formatting in the citations should be consistent. The easiest fix if probably to stick with m-d-y throughout; e.g., July 17, 2010, rather than 2010-07-17.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 19:31, 14 August 2010 (UTC)