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I've listed this article for peer review because i have been working very hard on the article over the past week and would like some feedback as to whether people think that it's heading in the right direction and what improvements can be made. i know the lead still needs some work so if anyone could give any points of improvement for that it would be great. also, i'm having trouble finding reliable sources for the music video directors so help with that would also be great.

Thanks, :) Mister sparky (talk) 16:25, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The discography at chartstats does not contain a chart peak for - or indeed even mention - five live EP. Do you have a citation for the charity aspect of December song in the lead? The sentence: "The former four all US number ones." does not contain a verb. "Sophomore" isn't a common term outside of the US; maybe use "second" instead. Maybe split the "Don't let the sun go down on me" sentence into two; the two "and"s make it awkward to read. He would have recorded three songs for the charity album. Hyperlink "Iraq War". You also have an open bracket in the last paragraph of the lead.
That's all the problems that jump out at me from the lead. Are you coming back to Gwen Stefani discography? It was fun but brief. -- EA Swyer Talk Contributions 18:28, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
hey, thanks for your comments! some of them dont apply anymore because i had to shorten the lead, but i've fixed the other ones :) anything else? and yes i'll be back :) Mister sparky (talk) 22:45, 8 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Everything looks great to me: tables are well organized, references are formatted correctly, image has a CC license, and the lead is very well written. I find no faults. // Gbern3 (talk) 19:41, 12 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]