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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to get this article to GA status if possible. There seems to be a good basis to the article already, I just want to know how I can turn it into a GA.

Thanks, 02blythed (talk) 15:11, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I think you should get this copyedited by one of the regulars before it is PRed. The language needs to be improved at several places. If you take the intro -

  • The first line should simply say who he is - cricketer, batsman, captain of South Africa
  • No need for the details like the Pollock affair in the intro
  • Bit more about what he does
  • IMHO, it is better not to include stats which are very volatile in the intro - in this case the 54 matches, which will become out of date tomorrow. Tintin 16:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Is it now Ok 02blythed (talk) 08:35, 11 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Over the last few hours I have greatly improved the refs. Any more comments. 02blythed (talk) 15:56, 11 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Eddie6705 (talk · contribs)

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I went through starting to cleanup the article and found a few pointers.

  • There should be no spaces between a comma or full stop, and the reference.
  • The reference shouldn't have redlinks in and some of them don't actually link anywhere, e.g. [http:content-uk.cricinfo.com/southafrica/content/player/47270. profile of Graeme Smith]. Cricinfo.
  • The individual sentances in the Career highlights sections should be combined to make larger paragraphs.
  • Headings should only have one capital letter in per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (capital letters)#Section headings. For example Early Years would become Early years.

Hope these can help. Eddie6705 (talk) 20:16, 15 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]