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Grounds for divorce (United States)

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I've listed this article for peer review because…I am trying to get the article to be good enough for GA status, but there are prose/grammar/style issues that are preventing it from getting there. I and the article's other editors have reached out to various people to help us copy-edit, but our GA reviewer felt that the page still needs work. I was hoping that someone here might have some suggestions for how we might improve the page further.

Thanks, Ntj2 (talk) 21:17, 9 December 2011 (UTC)

I'll do this. --Noleander (talk) 04:24, 13 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments from Noleander

• Section title "Irretrievable breakdown" - probably should be "irreconcilable differences" ... latter seems much more common.
• Lead - maybe list some major states that are "fault" states, and list some that are "no fault"
• Wording - ".. the acquisition of no-fault divorce." Acquisition doesnt seem right: re-structure sentence: maybe "... provides for divorces to be granted without assigning fault .." or similar.
• "Marriage partners who are living apart have grounds for no-fault divorce...." is that all states? or just some states?
• "Like Louisiana, various states have statutes requiring the parties to live apart from one another for a certain predetermined period of time" - this needs to be re-worded. Maybe: "Many states have statutes requiring the parties to live apart from one another for a certain predetermined period of time before a no-fault divorce can be granted"
• "Every state within the United States accepts some form of no-fault divorce" - "accepts" doesnt seem right. Try "provides for" or "accomodates" or 'has provisions for"
• Two duplicate sentences: "A fault divorce is a divorce which is granted after the party asking for the divorce sufficiently proves that the other party did something wrong that justifies ending the marriage.[7] The party filling for the divorce must prove that the other party has done something to justify ending the union." Those 2 sentences are nearly identical: combine into 1 sentence.
• Money: "Another benefit of a fault divorce is the monetary gain." - This is critical, and needs to be elaborated upon. In Community property states, the property division is always 50-50 regardless of fault vs no-fault. But in non-Community property states, what is the $$ consequence of fault vs no-fault. Does the aggrieved spouse get a windfall?
• Section title: "Other/unusual grounds" - dont use slashes in titles (or in the prose body either). Try "Other grounds".

... I'll come back and do more later.

End Noleander comments. --Noleander (talk) 04:35, 13 December 2011 (UTC)

Thanks so much for your comments thus far, Noleander; we'll be making these changes shortly. Ntj2 (talk) 17:41, 15 December 2011 (UTC)