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Hannah Montana: Hits Remixed

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I don't if Hannah Montana: Hits Remixed could be expanded or ever nominated towards GA. I ultimately want the article to be at its best state.

Thanks, Ipodnano05 (talk) 04:16, 4 October 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: This is a really short article so there is not a lot to review, but here are some suggestions for improvement.

• The language is rough and in places I was not even sure what was meant. This will have to be improved for any attempt at GA. For example, just in the lead the first sentence is not very clear Hannah Montana Hits Remixed is the second remix album by American pop recording artist Miley Cyrus, under the fictional character/alter ego of Hannah Montana, and the seventh album released by the franchise. I know Cyrus plays the character of Montana on a TV show, but this sentence does not make that clear enough. I am also confused as the infobox / navbox at the bottom of the article seems to show this is the fifth album from the Hannah Montana franchise, but the lead says it is the seventh (assume that HM is the franchise meant). So perhaps something like Hannah Montana Hits Remixed is the second remix album by American pop recording artist Miley Cyrus, in the role of her fictional alter ego Hannah Montana. It was the fifth Hannah Montana album released (perhaps add the date of release here?).
• The lead needs to follow WP:LEAD and be a summary of the rest of the article - as a summary nothing should be in the lead only, but being sold only at Wal-Mart is only in the lead, for example.
• The article is missing sections normally seen in articles on music albums. There is not really a production section - I know it is a remix album, but who did the remixes? Did Cyrus have to rerecord any tracks?
• There is also nothing on Critical reception, which needs to be in there
• Watch tense - is and was in the same sentence It was released on August 19, 2008 under Walt Disney Records and is sold exclusively at American Wal-Mart stores.[4]
• A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are many FAs on albums that would be potential model articles.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:34, 18 October 2009 (UTC)