Wikipedia:Peer review/Harry Potter fandom/archive2

Harry Potter fandom

Just ready to send this off to WP:FAC. The only thing I could see that needs work (as mentioned in the last peer review) is that the end of the Roleplaying section needs references; however, I wonder if this is uncontroversial information. The thing is that most of it comes from forums and from playing the RPGs themselves, not a specific page with rules. Anyway, if anyone has any suggestions on how to cite it, as well as on the rest of the article, it'd be much appreciated. --Fbv65edel / ☑t / ☛c || 04:19, 7 May 2007 (UTC)

• Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 22:09, 8 May 2007 (UTC)

Comments from Guiltyspark

•  Done I don't like the way the passage in the middle of the intro talking about security measures on the books. In the intro, this needs only a passing reference. Consider replacing it with a slightly more detailed overview of the activities the fans take part in - mentioning cosplay, fan fiction etc
•  Done The intro passage to 'pottermania' has (in my opinion) far too many statistics.
•  Done In general, the structure could do with some work. Some paragraphs just don't seem to sit well under their headings.
• Overall, this is a nice article, very well referenced and with interesting pictures.
  • Thanks a lot. Comments like these are quite rewarding. --Fbv65edel / ☑t / ☛c || 01:29, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

guiltyspark 12:24, 9 May 2007 (UTC)