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Homura Akemi

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know if this article is good enough to reach the GA status. I've been working to improve this article for the last few months and plan to nominate it to GAN soon although it has not been copy-edited yet so the prose still needs a lot of work. I would just like to know what sections/parts of the article need to be improved for it to have a chance of passing the Good article nomination. I am looking forward to your comments!

Thanks, NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 21:29, 1 August 2020 (UTC)

So you're on a project to get these Puella Magi Madoka Magica characters to GA status, I think. Is that really the case? -iaspostb□x+ 08:03, 4 August 2020 (UTC)

Hello! Yes, I'm planning to make all Madoka Magica related articles to GA status, starting with the characters first. But as you can see, I'm not fluent in English so my grammar and prose are pretty bad. I have requested for a copy-edit for Sayaka Miki and Homura at the GOCE, and I plan to nominate them to GAN in the future. However, I feel that Homura's article is still not ready for GAN and needs a lot of improvements, especially the "Characterization" and "Psychoanalysis" section. So I would just like to know what section do you think need to be improved? NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 16:24, 4 August 2020 (UTC)

The article's similar to your GAN Kyoko Sakura, I can say. -iaspostb□x+ 08:12, 4 August 2020 (UTC)

I don't intend to review articles, but if someone wants me to do so then I'll peer-review this thing. You named yourself "NotEnglishSpeaker" because you aren't fluent in English. -iaspostb□x+ 16:43, 4 August 2020 (UTC)

Oh, alright. I just wanted to know what section of this article need to be improved so I start working on it. Could you peer-review this article when you have time? NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 17:06, 4 August 2020 (UTC)

Yes, I'll peer-review this article when I have time. -iaspostb□x+ 17:16, 4 August 2020 (UTC)

Thank you very much! NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 17:27, 4 August 2020 (UTC)

Here's my peer-review: I think the "Characterization" and "Psychoanalysis" sections need to be improved. The prose could've been more comfortable to read, and there should've been less quotes in the text. I guess this is helpful. -iaspostb□x+ 05:13, 5 August 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for the comments! I'll try to do my best to improve the two sections you mentioned. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 22:48, 5 August 2020 (UTC)

You're welcome! -iaspostb□x+ 06:15, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

I would like to have some thoughts from @DarkFallenAngel: and @Maplestrip: on this article and some suggestions before closing the peer-review. What parts of this article need to be improved? Do you guys think it's ready for GAN? Any suggestions would be very much appreciated!NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 23:04, 5 August 2020 (UTC)

This article is poorly written and needs a lot of work, especially the development section. "Characterization and themes" and "Psychoanalysis" sections are also mostly full of quotes that could be worked into prose. A copy-edit is required for this article. I hope this is helpful. DarkFallenAngel (talk) 02:42, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the comment! I know the prose needs a lot of work, I have already requested for a copy-edit at the GOCE. As for the development section, I'll see if I can find more content about Homura's creation. The official guidebook 'Only You' have a lot of comments regarding Homura's character and design (her Devil outfit and her witch form) but unfortunately I don't have the book yet and can't find the contents online. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 14:30, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

Closing this peer-review. If anyone has a suggestion on improving this article please leave a comment on my talk page or this article's talk page. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 14:36, 10 August 2020 (UTC)