Wikipedia:Peer review/Impossible Princess/archive5

Impossible Princess

Previous peer review

Over the past couple of years, there has been a significant change within this article's grammar, punctuation, referencing, etc. This article is the sixth studio album by Kylie Minogue, whom I am a fan of and heavily dedicated to this (personal matters aside...). I have already achieved several GA with the corresponding singles, remix albums, and other releases from this album, and this article, to, is registered as a GA. However, since its change when it had achieved GA status, more facts and information started to flourish and it has slightly changed the article, for better and for worse. I am wanting to nominate it for FA, but first I need help in correcting any errors, grammar errors, spelling, formatting, etc. as much as possibly so I can achieve this. I would appreciate any comments below, soft or constructive, so I can improve it towards my goal (I do my editing and sight-seeing real quick, so once there's a comment, they'll bound to be a change). Thank you and ping me for each comment!

Thanks, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 02:29, 22 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• at producing and composing — "in production and composition"
• polarized reactions — "a polarized response"
• the sound and experimentation was commended — "the sound and experimentation were commended"
• the public, whom were — "the public, which was" (collective nouns read better this way)
• prompt further tabloid exploitation on Minogue and the album's behalf — "prompted further tabloid exploitation of Minogue and the album"
• released from the album — "released off the album"
• all which experienced — "all of which experienced"
• Since the albums release — "Since the album's release"
• as her lowest point of her career — "as the lowest point of her career"

Background and development

• she took partial control over the project — "she took over partial control of the project"
• music critics, many whom — "music critics, many of whom"
• her move to dance music, and her development in maturity — "her move into dance music, and development in maturity"
• according to Cave, he was interested — "according to Cave, he became interested"
• In an interview for British magazine NME, she wanted to — "In an interview for British magazine NME, Minogue explained she wanted to"
• the first track, which later remained unreleased, "You're the One" — "the first track, "You're the One", which later went unreleased"
• recorded during one take — "recorded in one take"
• that majority of the content — "that a majority of the content"
• did not attend majority of — "did not attend a majority of"
• the sickness of the labels head — "the sickness of the label's head director"
• Because of this, Minogue took partial control over the project — "Because of this, Minogue took over partial control of the project"
• the albums production phases — "the album's production phases"
• the albums tracks — "of the album's tracks"

Composition

• all whom influenced Minogue during — "all of which influenced Minogue in"
• material on Impossible Princess were — "material on Impossible Princess was"
• which resulted into — "which resulted in"
• Marcel Anders felt majority of — "Marcel Anders felt a majority of"
• writer Bence Illés, he wrote that — "writer Bence Illés wrote that"
• Vocally, Cinquemani compared the singer's vocals to American singer — "Cinquemani compared Minogue's vocals to those of American singer"

Songs

• Featuring "chaotic" arrangement — "Featuring a "chaotic" arrangement"
• The Ages John Mangan — "The Age's John Mangan"
• musical elements of Middle Eastern music — "elements of Middle Eastern music"
• Britian — "Britain"
• her relationship with her boyfriend — "the relationship with her boyfriend"
• her career, and her personal choices — "her career and personal choices"
• Written in Spain, "Limbo"'s sound — "Written in Spain, the sound of "Limbo""
• compared to Bjork's single "Venus as a Boy", according to Cinquemani and R. Smith — "compared to Bjork's single "Venus as a Boy" by Cinquemani and R. Smith"

Titling and artworks

• Titling and artworks — "Titles and artwork"
• whom he had given it to one of her friends — "whom had given it to one of her friends"
• the albums recording process — "the album's recording process"
• to re-titled the album — "that the album be retitled"

Release

• Minogue, discussing about the delays — "Minogue, discussing the delays"
• but was postponed to May — "but it was postponed to May"
• but was postponed again — "but the album was postponed again"
• Consider removing the link for death of Diana, Princess of Wales as it was cited in the previous subsection
• August–September 1997 — "August 1997" (Spencer died on 31 August 1997)
• which was manufacture in Australia — "which was manufactured in Australia"
• Consider removing the repeated wikilink to Compact Cassette as well

Singles

• issued in the UK and United States — "issued in the UK and US" (consistency)

Critical response

• Upon the albums release, it received polarized responses — "Upon release, it received a polarized response"
• According to British author Sean Baker, whom wrote a biography detailing Minogue's life and career, he noticed that — "British author Sean Baker, who wrote a biography detailing Minogue's life and career, noticed that"
• Willmott furthered wrote — "Willmott wrote"
• new musical genres into the album, all that were outside of her previous work — "new musical genres into the album that were disparate from her previous work"
• the production and repetitious nature — "the production and the album's repetitious nature"
• Add italics to Who's mention of the title
• Impossible Princess range of styles — "Impossible Princess' range of styles"
• Awarding to four stars — "Awarding four stars"
• the materials lack of — "the material's lack of"
• he concluded "Brave — "he concluded, "Brave" (punctuation)

Commercial performance

• minor impact on there record charts — "minor impact on the record charts"
• it's final charting position — "its final charting position"
• which has been recognized by British publications — "which led British publications to recognize it"
• was noted by the lack of promtoional activity — "was noted for the lack of promotional activity"
• titling changes — "title changes"
• After a year of its release, UK Virgin Radio mocked the sales of the album — "After a year of release, UK Virgin Radio mocked the album sales"

Promotion and live performance

• album was "selling better well" in Australia — "album was "selling better" in Australia"
• didn't perform — "did not perform"

Impact

• Since the albums release — "Since the album's release"
• but lost to Unit by Regurgitator respectively — "but lost to Unit by Regurgitator"
• Minogue was nominated was nominated — "Minogue was nominated"
• her key re-inventions of her career — "the key re-inventions of her career"
• from her fan base during its initial release, whom did not appreciate — "during its initial release from her fan base, whom did not appreciate"
• according to Michael R. Smith from Daily Vault, he believed — "Michael R. Smith from Daily Vault believed"
• were not present majority of the time to access the record, nor promote it properly — "were not present a majority of the time to access the record or promote it properly"
• and has since resulted as her — "and has since become her"
• positive critiques — "positive critique"
• according to The Guardian's Tim Jonze, he felt the latter release saved her career — "according to The Guardian's Tim Jonze, the latter release saved her career"
• her most misunderstood album in her career — "the most misunderstood album in her career"
• Add italics to the two mentions of Impossible Princess 2
• she may fear it "it would be — "she may fear it "would be"
• it didn't exactly sell truckloads of album! — "it didn't exactly sell truckloads of albums!"

Other additional releases

• Other additional releases — "Additional releases" ("other" and "additional" are synonyms)

Ping! @CaliforniaDreamsFan:
Cognissonance (talk) 18:51, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

@Cognissonance: My sincere apologize for the late reply; I have done all these adjustments as requested above CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 04:01, 20 October 2016 (UTC)