Wikipedia:Peer review/Internet/archive2
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to receive feedback on what should be done to improve the article, solely in terms of content, since I usually make copyediting the final step for an article as the contents usually exhibit significant changes. What would you like to see in the article? What does not belong in this article, and should instead be moved to a sub-article/linked article? Thanks. Gary King (talk) 18:54, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Just noticed this had no feedback, so here are some suggestions for improvement.
- I know you only want content comments, but I can't help but mention that the lead does not really meet WP:LEAD (needs to be expanded - my rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way)
- I also note that the article needs many more references.
- The Growth section of history seems very fragmentary and sparse compared to the previous history section
- The Workplace and Digital natives sections are also very short and need to be expanded or else combined with others
- Perhaps more on the porn, gambling and gaming industries influence on the growth of the net
- The whole Dot-com bubble of the 1990s could be included
- There is no mention at all of the phrase Web 2.0
- Intellectual property issues and the Napster phenomenon could be included
- Distributed computing is not in the article
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 22:56, 21 August 2009 (UTC)