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James Milner[edit]

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This article became a good aricle almost three years ago and since then the subject's career has greatly escalated with him playing for his country at the world cup.

I think this aricle needs another proper review to make sure it covers everything.

Thanks, BUC (talk) 12:49, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Sandman888 (talk) ^{Latest FAC} 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"Milner's talent in football, cricket, and long-distance running was recognised when he was a child. He represented his school in these sports and played football for amateur teams from Rawdon and Horsforth. " doesn't read great.
"only" POV
it reads like he stills plays for Newcastle. please expand/rewrite last section.

Early life

what's "11 GCES"?
"Milner took as much interest in watching football as he did playing it. " OR
"Peter and Lesley," unimportant
"played for the Republic of Ireland at under-14 level" doesnt match infobox
"against Italy, Czech Republic and Brazil, scoring a goal against Brazil.[8]" reads poorly

Club career

More pov:
- with a deft first touch of the ball and manoeuvre
- Milner continued to impress
^[who?]:
- He could be deemed a traditional English winger.
the whole style of play reads really poorly.

References

Don't mix date formats, keep to DD MONTH YYYY

Decent article. I might do some more, but that should get something going. Consider reviewing History of FC Barcelona. Sandman888 (talk) ^{Latest FAC} 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]