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Jennifer Hudson discography[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review becaus I feel that the article is well-referenced. Although it isn't at all ready for FLC, I would like some creative imput as to how I can improve the article to this high standard. Thanks, Dt128 (talk) 17:17, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. Mostly looks good per MOS:DISCOG. US Dance Club Play column should read "US Dance" and the Canadian cite should be moved up into the column to be with the rest. "If This Isn't Love" needs a ref for its director, and the footnote for her new single should just read "To be released", preferably with a cite verifying it. Ten Pound Hammer, his otters and a clue-bat • ^{(Many otters • One bat • One hammer)} 02:35, 27 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- As for the reference for Diane Martel, I cannot find one from a reliable, suitable source. Dt128 (talk) 14:26, 27 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  - Hmm. That's strange. Ten Pound Hammer, his otters and a clue-bat • ^{(Many otters • One bat • One hammer)} 17:05, 27 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: The number of albums and singles is really short and I think as such it does not meet the requirements for WP:FL - you may want to ask on the FL talk page. Anyway, here are some suggestions for improvement.

The first paragraph is one sentence - I think it should be expanded to several sentences, or better, combined with the second paragraph.
The lead says three singles and the infobox says five singles - which is correct?
The lead says one album, but the article lists two albums. Again, which is it?
This needs a copyedit - the proper spelling is "incorporates" and the last phrase in Hudson rose to fame as a contestant on the third series of American Idol, however being eliminated at the "Top 7" stage.[1] is just not grammatically correct.
This becoming one of the few people to win an award at the ceremony for a debut performance. needs a ref (extraordinary claim)
The top is number one, not number two The album shot to the top of the Billboard charts, debuting at number two on the Billboard 200 chart.
Refs need to meet WP:RS - Amazon is not usually seen as a reliable source
Refs alos need to be consistent - is it "amazon" or "amazon" as one example?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:26, 6 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]