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Kirkcaldy

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I've listed this article for peer review because i would like to push Kirkcaldy towards A and eventually to FA status. Currently, the article is at GA status, which was achieved in October 2008. Since, i know there is still much to be done (such as a history timeline in economy; the mention of Adam Smith's annual lecture; some notable buildings such as those in the Fergus places, Wemyssfield, Hunter House, Abbotshall Church and the old Post Office still to be mentioned in landmarks; a good introduction in landmarks and the mention of Victoria Hospital). I would be grateful if you have a good look at the article and see what areas need to be tackled.

Thanks, Kilnburn (talk) 12:09, 7 May 2009 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: A lot of work has gone into this article, which appears comprehensive to this complete outsider. In addition, the article is well-illustrated. However, I see many prose issues and Manual of Style issues that need to be addressed. You might be able to find help with copyediting at WP:PRV#General copyediting or at Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors#Requests for collaboration or help. Here are a few specific suggestions for improvement, but they are only a representative sample of a larger set of mostly small things that need to be fixed.

• A sentence in the lede says, "A harbour built around the east burn gradually led to the growth of the town surrounding the harbour itself, main street and Tiel burn following the demand of trade with the Baltic." - If the formal name of the stream is East Burn, each word of its name should start with a capital letter. In fact, it is written as East Burn in the "Built environment" section. Likewise, if Tiel Burn is the formal name of a stream, it should be treated the same way. In addition, the sentence is confusing. I can't tell whether increased trade with Baltic nations preceded the building of the harbour or whether building a harbour led to increased trade.

• Another sentence in the lede says, "The Industrial Revolution of the 19th and 20th centuries proved to be the most famous period for the town which saw the introduction of linoleum." - "Famous" does not seem like the right word. "Prosperous" might be better. The sentence needs a comma after "town". Also, a town doesn't "see". Suggestion: "The town became a prosperous center of linoleum production during the Industrial Revolution." Or perhaps it would be better to say "during the late 19th century", if that is the case.

• Captions start with a capital letter even if they consist only of sentence fragments.

• In "History", a sentence says, "The company, which has since become known as forbo nairn has also diversified into the production of vinyl floor tiles and marmoleum for which the latter is now their speciality." - The company's name is written as "Forbo-Nairn" in the caption next to this sentence. The caption is probably correct. Also, the sentence is ungrammatical. Suggestion: "The company, which later became Forbo-Nairn, diversified into the production of vinyl floor tiles and its specialty, marmoleum."

• Another sentence in "History" says, "As Kirkcaldy entered into the 19th century, the arrival of the Kirkcaldy and District Railway, later to become part of the North British Railwaysaw the town develop into the industrial heart of Fife... " Here "Railway" and "saw" are run together. In addition, a railway can't see. Maybe "helped" would be better.

• In "Town centre", a sentence says, "The central portion of Kirkcaldy's High Street was pedestrianised in 1991 between Whytescauseway and Kirk Wynd." - I don't believe "pedestrianised" is a real word.

• A caption says, "the location where Adam Smith, wrote his most famous work - 'The Wealth of Nations' " - The book title should be in italics.

• The newspaper names in the "Media" section should be in italics.

• A lot of the reference numbers in the text need to be snugged up against the punctuation. Here's an example from the "Education" section: "The oldest of the four secondary schools is Kirkcaldy High School, which was established initially as a burgh school in 1582, before the present name was adopted in 1872. [136]" The sentence should end with "1872.[136]".

• The last sentence in the article says, "The nearest major international airport is Edinburgh airport with the nearest ferry sea port at Rosyth being 26 miles (42 km) and 17 miles (27 km), respectively." - The "with plus -ing" construction is ungrammatical. Suggestion: "The nearest major international airport is Edinburgh Airport, 26 miles (42 km) away, and the nearest ferry seaport is at Rosyth, 17 miles (27 km) from Kirkcaldy."

• Page ranges such as "pp.12-15" in citation 3, take en dashes rather than hyphens: "12–15"

• In "Transport", a sentence says, "The main bus terminus is located on a site to the north of the town centre which provides twelve stances as well as seating, toilets, a cafe and a hairdresser." - What are "stances"?

• On my computer screen, Image:Forbo-Nairn linoleum factory, Kirkcaldy.jpg bumps into the "Governance" head and needs to be moved up a bit.

• The images should generally be set to "thumb" size rather than to a specific pixel size. It would be best to remove the specific pixel settings from the image templates.

I hope these brief comments prove helpful. Finetooth (talk) 00:23, 17 May 2009 (UTC)