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LSWR N15 class[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it is on the way to becoming an FA. It has reached GA standard, and some tweaks have been made in an effort to improve the article further.

Thanks, Bulleid Pacific (talk) 23:04, 27 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: An interesting article and already in very good shape (so I don't have a lot of suggestions). Here's some hopefully helpful ideas:

  • Provide context to the reader - see WP:PCR. Some phrases need more clarification / context for the average reader. Example from the lead: Following the Grouping of 1923,...
  • This Grouping is also not mentioned as such again in the text, but by WP:LEAD everything in the lead should also be in the body of the article.
  • My rule of thumb is that anything which is a named section in the article should be mentioned in the lead, even if only a word or phrase. So Scotch Arthurs and Livery and numbering do not seem to be in the Lead now.
  • Per the MOS, "The" should not be in section headers unless absolutely required - so "Urie N15s" and "Scotch Arthurs".
  • Some terms could be linked that are not now, for example Gawain (Gawain and the Green Knight was on the Main Page as an FA earlier this month). Also any chance of explaining who Sir Lamiel was in Arthurian legend?
  • For FA all units will have be in both English and metric units - {{convert}} may be useful here.
  • Refs seem fine except I don't understand the ordering in the References section (Abcs are out of alphabetical order by author's last name?). Also be consistent on the title - in the refs current ref 25 is ""Abc of British Railways Locomotives, winter 1958–59 edition". Ian Allan." but the References section lists it as "Ian Allan ABC of British Railways Locomotives, winter 1958–59 edition (Ian Allan: Hinckley)"

Hope this helps, and thanks for an interesting read, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 10:19, 30 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Since the list of locomotives links the names, it does not have be linked here. I still think that a sentence or phrase identifying Lamiel would be useful. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 23:02, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I looked at it again and it has been improved. I made a few copyedits - one was what seemed to be a broken ref tag, so please check that I fixed it correctly. I have three final suggestions: 1) since there is an article on Sir Lamiel (the engine and the knight) I would still link the first occurence in the text. 2) For FAC they will want a nonbreaking space, ( &nbsp; )between units and numbers (or use of convert, which also fixes this). 3) I did not see any changes to the refs - there is still an inconsistency on the Abc ref title. Hope this helps, and let me know when this is at FAC Ruhrfisch ><>°° 13:16, 3 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The above comments have been dealt with. More are welcome.--Bulleid Pacific (talk) 14:02, 10 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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