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Article seems pretty good as it is, but it could do for improvements. - A Link to the Past (talk) 04:50, August 21, 2005 (UTC)

Redwolf24's Review

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I, Redwolf24, will be working on this peer review. Strike out things once changed please.

  • Could use more links in lead-in paragraph. Link to turtle.

*Perhaps lengthen the lead-in. * He rides on a cloud and throws Spinies, turtle-like creatures with spiked shells, at Mario (or Luigi for the second player), the game's protagonist <---change to throws spinies at the game's protagonist, Mario (or Luigi for the second player). Sounds less choppy IMO.

I disagree with the deletion of the definition of "Spinies". Wikipedia articles on game-related subjects often forget that not everyone who accesses an article will be familiar with the subject. In other words, it's important to remember the uninitiated. BrianSmithson 11:32, 22 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Oh no that wasn't my intent. My intent was to change the wording with Mario and Protagonist. I just didn't retype it to make this PR quick. I mentioned it in the IRC room to Link too. Redwolf24 20:00, 22 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

*Thumbnail the Mario Kart images and make them a bit smaller. Also, maybe add a pic of MarioKart64?

See the Talk page. I don't think the English pronunciation is known. I could try to write Nintendo, though. BrianSmithson 13:42, 1 September 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Rob Church's Review

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I, Rob Church, will be adding my peer review below also. As for Redwolf24, please strike out anything I raise should you address it.

  • I agree, the leader needs more wikilinks and these should be distributed evenly throughout that text.
Done.
  • Consider changing "as neither friend nor foe to" to "as neutral to", in the leader text.
Done.
  • In which of the games was "Mario's quest to save Princess Peach and retrieve the 120 Power Stars"? This isn't made sufficiently clear.
Done.
  • Consider splitting Characteristics into subsections Appearance, Attacks and Defense and move the content about accordingly.
Idunno. The sections would become awfully short if we did this.

Other comments

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Done. BrianSmithson 13:42, 1 September 2005 (UTC)[reply]