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List of FA Vase winners[edit]
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A companion piece of List of FA Trophy winners, which is currently at FLC, and the general format is a straight crib, but I thought I'd best check if there were any egregious errors in the prose which might need ironing out.....
Thanks, ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:35, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
- Comments from The Rambling Man on tour (talk)
- Are those image captions fragments?
- "The record for the most wins is held by Billericay Town, with three wins." - not keen on too many "wins" here. Especially as you have "won" in the next sentence, could be made to sound more elegant?
- "...currently held by AFC Fylde, then known as Kirkham & Wesham, ..." no context for "then..." at this point, so reads a little odd to the non-expert... maybe?
- Does the final have extra time if required? If so (and the key says yes) then "...always been decided on the day, with a penalty shootout as required..." should probably have "... with extra time and a penalty shootout as required..." (worded a bit better than that...).
- I'm a little unclear as to when prize is money is awarded - you say "that accumulated for winning earlier rounds" - is money awarded even at round one? (Just for my interest really)
- Don't see a real need to wikilink the key as each subject is wikilinked just in the section above.
Hope that helps! I'm off to Singapore now... good luck! The Rambling Man on tour (talk) 06:51, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking time out from your globetrotting to look over the article. I've actioned your changes, although I'm still not 100% convinced that the bit about most wins reads too elegantly. As for prize money, it is indeed awarded by round all the way from the first qualifying round, where the winners currently get £800. I don't feel, though, that putting any further details about the workings of prize fund all the way through the competition really belongs in an article which is solely about the winners of the Vase - it should be in the main FA Vase article, and I will add it at some point, but I don't think it belongs here. If you feel it's too confusing as it stands, I could always just remove the "in addition to......" clause.....? -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:18, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
Just a quick comment, the scores that have an * or † can be in line with the other scores if you add before the score. Have a look here to see what I mean as I can't get it to show up here. NapHit (talk) 13:24, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- Cheers for that! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 13:31, 3 December 2008 (UTC)