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List of Fairy Tail characters

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because we have been working on this for a potential FL candidate over the past couple of months and has gone through an extensive copyedit. I would like to have some feedback on how we can improve this list even further.

Thanks, Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 00:36, 14 May 2012 (UTC)

I am halting this peer review one week from today per the discussion at Talk:List of Fairy Tail characters#Peer review. Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 02:51, 14 May 2012 (UTC)

Peer review restarted. Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 20:58, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead could be longer. The list is mammoth and therefore the lead could easily handle more info (don't forget it's supposed to summarise the entire article).
• Lead image could then be bigger, and the caption should be improved to describe the characters shown.
• Also, captions shouldn't have a period unless they're complete sentences.
• You should use DISPLAYTITLE to ensure Fairy Tale is shown as Fairy Tail in the article title.
• "rambunctious titular guild" ok but you haven't said that Fairy Tail is a guild...
• J. R. R. Tolkien has spaces between the J and the R etc.
• " For the relationship between Natsu and Igneel, " who's Igneel? You mentioned him in the lead but you should be expanding here.

Expanded. Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 22:42, 8 June 2012 (UTC)

• "he had a lot of yelling in the" okay, but doesn't read very encyclopaedically.
• What is ADR?

Clarified. Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 22:42, 8 June 2012 (UTC)

• "(妖精の尻尾フェアリーテイル) Fearī Teiru?)," seems to be missing a (
• café -> cafe. Sufficiently anglicised now to avoid the accent.
• "He joins Fairy Tail..." reiterate Natsu here (because the last "he" you mentioned was Igneel).
• "[ch. 1,5] " space after the comma. Ditto throughout.
• "in using celestial magic... using a set of . ... She uses a ..." repetitive.
• "Heartfilia[n 3]," note after the comma.
• "becomes more friendly with " -> more friendly = friendlier.
• "halves their affects if " that'd be "effects".
• Generally, I find the frequency of citations and notes to be off-putting. Consider putting them all at the end of sentences so I can read the prose and only have to wait until the end of the sentence I'm reading before I find the appropriate citation.
• General again, no more fair use images you could use here for these characters? Since for some of them you go a way to explain how they appear (e.g. Happy), I would imagine that would constitute good grounds for a FU image.
• "In the Japanese series, her voice actress is Yui Horie.[11]" one example of where you don't have the corresponding English dub artist. Why not?

Funimation does not have the license to dub the episodes yet. Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 22:42, 8 June 2012 (UTC)

• "S-Class Wizard" be consistent with capitalisation of W/wizard.
• "Shadow Gear[n 14], " note after punctuation.
• "[ch. 244-248]" en-dash for ranges.
• "can even turn her" no need for "even".
• "but loses an arm, leg, and some organs as a result" sounds serious. Most people don't get over losing "some organs". Perhaps you could specify?
• In the "Other wizards" section, although it pains me, it's probably worth making the names of each of them bold.
• Reedus Jonah has a [citation needed] which should be fixed.

That's a good start. About half-way through. Please apply common comments above to the rest of the article. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:21, 7 June 2012 (UTC)

Note A second peer review was opened while this one was still active, so per this request on my talk page diff, I moved the relevant PR comments here and will delete the second PR. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:14, 9 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments from Tintor2 The article looks very good but I'm not too familiar with the series so I'll leave some issues I found

• A section named "Minor characters and groups" sounds as if they are not really notable characters, so maybe their information could be unsuitable in an encyclopedia.

Okay. Changed to "Other characters and guilds". Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 19:48, 8 June 2012 (UTC)

• Sections like Jellal Fernandes contain several plot details that can be trimmed.
• The reception section only uses sources from Anime News Network. Probably IGN, DVD, FandomPost and UK Anime Network also have reviews from Fairy Tail to add more opinions.