Wikipedia:Peer review/List of Formula One polesitters/archive1

List of Formula One polesitters

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I'm nominating this list for Peer review, as I'd like a few suggestions on how to improve the article before I take it to FLC. Cheers NapHit (talk) 18:32, 3 September 2010 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments. An interesting table. I don't envy you the task of keeping it up to date, though. A few suggestions:-

• A dablink to John Watson needs fixing
• "The most famous Grand Prix is the Monaco Grand Prix in Monte Carlo." That's a point of view, and irrelevant to this list
• "Drivers contest qualifying traditionally on the Saturday of a Grand Prix weekend to determine who will sit on pole position." Apart from the misplaced adverb, this sentence is inaccurate; qualifying is about fixing each driver's place on the starting grid, not just who will occupy pole position. You need to explain several things: first, that drivers have to come through a qualifying round before each F1 race to earn their places in the race, and that some are eliminated at this stage; secondly, that their times in qualifying determine their places on the starting grid for the race proper, with the faster qualifiers at the front of the grid; third, that "pole position" is the place at the front of the grid, held by the driver with the fastest qualifying time - the "polesitter".
• I see no need to recount the intricate details of the various qualifying systems that have been used; those details are not relevant to this article. A brief statement that different systems have been used over the last 60 years, and a short summary of the present system, should suffice. At present, your summary of the present system reads as though fifteen drivers are eliminated in qualifying, which is surely not right.
• The first two sentences of the final lead paragraph merely state what is evident from the table, and are unnecessary.
• The information re Farina needs a citation.
• The key needs to give a more explicit description of the asterisk, e.g. "Drivers who have held the Formula One World Championship"
• Why does ref 5 lack a retrieval date?

Brianboulton (talk) 17:48, 8 September 2010 (UTC)

I've had a go at these suggestions think the second para reads better now, see what you think. NapHit (talk) 19:38, 8 September 2010 (UTC)