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I've listed this article for peer review because this list, a failed FLC wasn't updated in the last 4 years. I have expanded this list with statistics upto date. I want everyone's feedback on how to make this an FL.

Thanks, —Commander (Ping me) 12:32, 2 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments –

  • We have a helpful example of a similar FL at List of England Twenty20 International cricketers. One thing I notice right off the bat is that the first paragraph is more well-developed in the England list. Modelling the first paragraph here after the one there would be wise.
Yes, that looks much better. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:21, 5 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "having played 31 T20I matches for 16 wins and a tie against Pakistan." "for" → "with"?
  • "In 2007, they became won the world championship...". Remove "became".
  • Is the fourth-highest total in an innings sourced by anything?
  • In the photo caption, the "till date" doesn't help the writing and would be better off removed.
  • Could cite captains and wicketkeepers in the key, like the England list does.
  • Players: "This list comprising of list of Indian cricketers...". Needs "comprising of list" taken out.
  • In the footnote, "international" should probably be capitalized.
  • The hyphen in the title of reference 2 should probably be an en dash. Such minor formatting improvements are permitted for ref titles.

(Talk) 22:40, 2 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • As Giants2008 suggested, improve the lead.
  • Rephrase "they became won".
  • Table does not meet WP:ACCESS requirements; use scope row, column and header, etc (if I'm not missing anything else).
  • Categorize the column headings into batting, bowling and fielding.
  • You didn't use ♠ anywhere.
  • Fix this large white space in the "Players" section, above the table. I guess you need to adjust the width of the table, or don't use it at all.
No, I was taking about width parameter. Actually you should use more good quality images. — Bill william comptonTalk 03:49, 5 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Instead of using slashes use dashes in the titles of the references.

— Bill william comptonTalk 03:10, 3 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • The Australian team is overlinked in the lead.
  • Tie v Pakistan isn't in ref 4.
  • You expand MS of MS Dhoni, but not RP of RP Singh.
  • Check sorting. E.g. HS, you have a 0 sorting before a bunch of en-dashes...
  • Suggest you force the en-dashes to sort before 0's in all columns.
  • Didn't get you. Can you make a dummy edit to illustrate tha if possible. —Commander (Ping me) 09:47, 4 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "first Twenty20 cap." not sure why "first Twenty20" is part of the link to the cap.
  • Virendar Sehwag ->Virender Sehwag.
  • Cricinfo linked in ref 1 and ref 4 only. Why not the lot or just the first?

The Rambling Man (talk) 13:53, 3 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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