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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm planning to take it to a Featured List status.

Thanks, Martin tamb (talk) 10:56, 9 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Although this list requires more attention than others as the content can change quickly.—Chris!c/t 22:26, 9 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

One more thing. Sorting needs some tweaking. Once a column is sorted, it is not possible to go back to the original order.—Chris!c/t 22:30, 9 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've rearranged the column and made teams as the default sorting order. — Martin tamb (talk) 06:47, 11 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Quick Comment: Per the title, what is meant by "current"? Brianboulton (talk) 23:38, 11 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It's the list of person who is currently serving as head coaches in the NBA. I've made a slight change in the lead, hopefully it's clearer now. — Martin tamb (talk) 05:32, 12 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Actually, I made another change on the lead, following a format from similar "current" lists that already promoted to FL status (List of current NHL captains and alternate captains and List of current champions in World Wrestling Entertainment). — Martin tamb (talk) 05:46, 12 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I understand what "current" means - it means as of now. Is it the intention that this list should have no fixed point in time, and that every change in head coach appointments will be recorded here? Brianboulton (talk) 23:45, 13 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. — Martin tamb (talk) 04:17, 14 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: Looks pretty good except for small grammar mistakes and proofing errors. I fixed a few of them and listed others below, but I'm not sure I caught them all.

Lead

  • "The National Basketball Association (NBA) is major professional basketball league in North America." - Missing word, "the" or "a"?
  • "The league adopted its current name at the start of 1949–1950 season when it merged with the National Basketball League (NBL)." - Missing word, "the"?
  • "They typically hold a more public profile... " - Since "they" refers to "head coach" in the previous sentence, the two words do not match in number; "coach" is singular, but "they" is plural.
  • "The list includes the head coaches' appointment date with the teams and their coaching record." - Suggestion: "The list includes the date of hiring and the performance record of each coach."
  • "Sloan has also coached most games (1,755), won most games (1,096), and lost most games (659)" - Missing words, "the" in three cases; e.g., "coached the most games"? Ditto for the similar Don Nelson sentence slightly later in the lead.
  • "the second longest stint among the other current head coach" - "Coaches" rather than "coach".
  • Names like Jay Triano and San Antonio Spurs should only be linked once in the lead. There may be other duplications as well. These two are just examples.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 19:31, 14 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the reviews, it is certainly very helpful. — Martin tamb (talk) 12:39, 21 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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