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Love in Motion (Anika Moa album)

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I have searched through the net for more sources of information but all reliable sources seem to have been included. A quick PR is all that is necessary, I'm really just looking for tips on where to go from here.

Thanks, Adabow (talk) 00:38, 14 April 2010 (UTC)

shaidar cuebiyar comments

1. The Lead section should summarise the entire article, currently its far too brief.
2. WP:MoS issues: album name should be given as Love in Motion not Love In Motion. Likewise In Swings the Tide.
3. Second sentence is missing a word or two?

Infobox summarises information from the rest of the article and so the references can be moved to the main text where this information should appear. If it doesn't appear then it should be added to the appropriate places.

Background and recording

1. Where's the background? Section starts with Moa extolling the album. A description of the album's position within her career would help.
2. "Scott Kara said, after interviewing Moa, said that Love In Motion "is about love on all levels," and Moa described love as having "so many aspects to it."" After interviewing Moa, The New Zealand Herald's Scott Kara said that her album "is about love on all levels", Moa described love as having "so many aspects to it". Tidying up expression and style.
3. While there add |publisher = [[APN News & Media]] into the ref.
4. Further copy editing of expression is needed in this section.
5. Her interviews make it plain that her wife, Azaria Universe, is a major inspiration for some tracks on this album but you omit this important detail from the background.
6. Single(s) released from the album should be mentioned: briefly (if they already have their own article).

Promotion

1. "The week of the release of the album Moa toured" During the week of the album's release, Moa toured

Critical reception

1. Newspaper names should be italicised, e.g. The Dominion Post
2. Kara should be identified as a reporter from The New Zealand Herald at first mention (see above) and so this detail is not needed here.

Chart performance

1. Peak position is notable enough to be included in the Lead.

Track listing

1. Moa claims to have written all the tracks but the songs' writer(s) need a reliable & independent source. Try <ref name="APRATwoHearts">{{cite web | publisher = [[Australasian Performing Right Association]] (APRA) | title = "Two Hearts" at APRA search engine | url = http://www.apra-amcos.com.au/worksearch.axd?q=Two%20Hearts | accessdate = 26 April 2010 }}</ref> for "Two Hearts". Adapt for the other tracks.
2. Use a spaced endash (e.g. "Two Hearts" – 4:03) as separator not a hyphen. (see WP:DASHES)
3. Check song titles' MoS, e.g. "Running Through the Fire (Storm)" and "Blame It on the Rain"

Personnel

1. List them alphabetically and you should include:

• Anika Moa – vocals

(note spaced endashes used here)

2. Where's the production details? Producer(s), engineer(s), album art designers/graphic artists? If known, put them in this section.

Enjoy.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 16:06, 25 April 2010 (UTC)