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I've listed this article for peer review because it has recently undergone a period of quite rapid improvement. Aim is to get this article featured.

Thanks, Tomlock01 (talk) 21:15, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment by Sandman:
  • The player records section needs proper citation going direct to the page in question.
  • Is the division between first league and premier league customary? Why not first division ~ 18? You don't divide CL and European Cup trohpies? Uninformed readers might think that first division is the second tier in English football.
  • Club officials need citation.
  • Club captain has a different source than the corresponding on list of Man utd players.
  • "In September 2006, a £56.5 million deal with current shirt sponsors AIG became the most valuable in the world" clarify please.
  • " making it the biggest sponsorship deal in football history" this is not supported by source.
  • "Ryan Giggs is the most decorated player in English football history." [citation needed]
  • "who demanded a then unprecedented level of control over team selection, player transfers and training sessions."[citation needed]
  • Avoid words like unprecedented unless it is in qoutes. You shldn't make that assertion yourself.
    • All in all, I'd go through all the facts again and find proper source.
ALL DONE! Tomlock01 (talk) 18:37, 11 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Casliber

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I generally look at comprehensiveness first

  • the Rivalries section is stubby. I'd add a sentence or two about the relationship with Man C (i.e. people like one and hate the other etc.)
  • The lead needs a bit of buffing. I might have a go at that myself