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Mixtape

I stumbled upon this completely by accident, and was surprised how good it is. This might even be close to a FA, but I'm running it through here first. Anything wrong with it? -- grm_wnr Esc 21:55, 30 September 2005 (UTC)

WHOA. Nice. Still has some issues though:

1. Probably needs a two paragraph intro - first paragraph is almost too big.
2. "Terminology" - last paragraph has only one sentence
3. "Mix tapes vs. compilations" - decent. Try compressing the paragraphs a bit more.
4. "Legal issues" - may need expansion
5. "Aesthetics" - one sentence paragraph and another paragraph that's too short
6. "Types of mix tapes" - I wouldn't use a list here and instead another paragraph
7. "Media references to mix tapes" - the lists look good but I think they need to be restructured. How is the hard question. I'd think about this for a while :)
8. "Mix tapes in global culture" - paragraphs are too short. Too short in general.
9. "External links" - need better descriptions on these

Take care! Ryan Norton ^{T | @ | C} 22:14, 30 September 2005 (UTC)

I like this article and will probably attempt some edits on it myself when I next get the chance. Some issues I would like to see addressed -

• In the lede, maybe I don't know my history of pop music all that well, but I wasn't aware there was a "pre-" and "post-Beatles" era when it comes to album arrangements.. could this be clarified with more context, or should it be removed as irrelevent? Also, how typically are mix tapes pop music? The article (and my experience) suggests that they are not limited to that style.
• Does someone have a stack of old mix tapes they could get us a picture of? (I have some mix cds I can take a shot or two of if nothing else, but tapes look more interesting.) The picture of the blank cd is not all that good quality and fails to fully illustrate the subject.
• The last sentence in the "History" section is fragmented and redundant, and can be removed.
• The start to Snoop Dogg's career does not seem directly relevant to this article to me. The continued contemporary use of underground mixtapes by DJs such as DJ Kayslay et al, as mentioned on the Talk page, would be worth further mention, however.
• As mentioned above, "types of mix tapes" shouldn't be in a list format, as it is admittedly not trying to be all-encompassing.
• One suggested link to the Legal issues section: Home taping is killing music! This section seems like it could be expanded, or further linked to issues surrounding music piracy, downloading, etc.
• In the references: Mix Tape was supposed to come out in December 2004, has it? Can anyone get a hold of a copy to see if it contains additional material worth adding to the article?

There are also some wording and writing style changes that I'll take a closer look at when I'm editing the article, rather than nit-picking them here. MC MasterChef 09:30, 2 October 2005 (UTC)

Not once do the words "hip hop" appear in the article; it doesn't even mention the wudepread distribution of mixtapes within the hip-hop scene, or mixtape DJs suc has DJ Clue, DJ Kayslay, etc. --FuriousFreddy 06:01, 6 November 2005 (UTC)