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Nicholas Mayall[edit]

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like it to be either a Good Article or a Featured Article, whichever is thought to be more appropriate.

Thanks, WilliamKF (talk) 01:27, 24 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Review by Ruslik.
  1. The article has good sources and is comprehensive, but needs a copy-edit.
    Submitted request for copy-edit. WilliamKF (talk) 14:32, 26 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  2. For instance, I do not understand what glass disk in Pasadena that was planned to test the 200-inch (5.1 m) Palomar mirror means.
    The cite states: In Pasadena he had seen the 120-inch glass disk originally intended for testing the 200-inch Palomar mirror, then nearly finished in the Caltech optical shop. So I believe it means that the glass was used to test the shape of the mirror. WilliamKF (talk) 14:31, 26 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    Found this: You make the mirror out of a plate glass disk or Pyrex glass disk. WilliamKF (talk) 15:11, 26 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    Fixed myself. Ruslik_Zero 15:53, 31 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  3. The last section (Retirement) should be expanded to include information about his death and the place of burial (and also about his wife's death).
    Added info on spreading his ashes and death from diabetes. WilliamKF (talk) 16:17, 25 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  4. I think that at some places there are to many inline citations—5 at the end of Kitt Peak National Observatory section.
    Another reviewer indicated I needed more citations to become a Good Article. I'm inclined to leave them, I reduced a few though. WilliamKF (talk) 15:10, 26 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  5. After copy-edit the article can easily become featured.
Ruslik_Zero 09:34, 25 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]