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Nikolay Voronov[edit]


I've listed this article for peer review because it needs another set of eyes before a GA nomination. I need feedback on issues with the article. Thanks, Kges1901 (talk) 10:22, 11 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)

  • "He reportedly showed personal courage": The difference between this and "He showed personal courage" is that the first expresses some doubt. What in the sources suggests doubt?
  • I copyedited down to World War II. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 02:36, 19 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • The problem is the only source for his personal courage, Kiselev, was written during the Soviet Union and could be ideologically biased. Kges1901 (talk) 09:04, 19 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      • That's a hard problem, and different Wikipedian writers will handle that problem in different ways. All I can say is, "reportedly" doesn't tell the reader what you meant ... they'll have to guess, and different readers will guess different things, so "reportedly" is ambiguous, at best. - Dank (push to talk) 14:13, 19 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
          • Would it be better just to remove the sentence? Voronov doesn't say anything about it in his memoirs. Kges1901 (talk) 20:00, 19 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
            • That's probably what I'd do. - Dank (push to talk) 20:15, 19 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Dead link
  • Suggest expanding the lead to two paragraphs
  • Suggest listing awards in the infobox rather than listing some and having images for others, particularly multiples
  • Was his external degree in a particular subject?
  • What happened to his father? Nikkimaria (talk) 14:21, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      • Fixed dead link
      • There isn't anything in his memoirs about his father's ultimate fate
      • changed infobox to something like the FA Ivan Bagramyan
      • his memoirs say external degree examination for matriculation
      • If the lead is expanded, what should the second paragraph contain Kges1901 (talk) 10:03, 28 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]