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Norton LiveUpdate

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am trying to bring this article to GA-class. The main issue is probably the context the article was written in; I think it was written for someone familiar with Norton products and Symantec. In addition, the text doesn't seem to flow very well.

Thanks,
Tyw7‍ ‍‍ (Talk ● Contributions) Leading Innovations >>> 00:03, 30 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Nvineeth :

The lead is very small, and "However, LiveUpdate cannot upgrade a version of Norton to a later version; rather, it can only apply updates for a particular version of Norton." does not belong to the lead, probably belongs to a "Drawbacks" section. Also note that the lead should give a overview of the article.
Rename "How it works" → "Operation"
The content seems to be small... can the article be merged to other suitable article?
{{cite web}} can be used for references, see citation styles.

Thanks, --Nvineeth (talk) 08:34, 7 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments II

Can "Norton LiveUpdate is a software developed by Symantec Corporation used to download and apply updates for Symantec's Norton product line." be rephrased as "Norton LiveUpdate is a desktop application developed by Symantec Corporation used to download and apply updates for Symantec's Norton product line.", if we are sure that it is used only with desktop apps.
"In the past, Norton LiveUpdate was a seperate software that is installed with all Symantec products. However, with the 2009 line, it is an integrated part of Norton" has some gramattical problems.. This can be rephrased as "Before the 2009 version of LiveUpdate, the software was required to be seperately installed."
"A valid and current subscription is required to use Symantec LiveUpdate" — "valid and current" can be replaced with "valid" :)
"How it works" vs "Operation". Note that when we say, "How it works", technical users may expect further details, (it) and this one being a closed source, proprietary, "Operation" seems to be a better word.
How about adding a section on Security advisories, (say from Securityfocus or Secunia) if there are any major critical vulnerabilities.
The content of the article can be expanded further, for example from this google news search
How about "Problems" sections, I am sure that LiveUpdate has problems . For ex see this

Thats it, thanks --Nvineeth (talk) 13:47, 8 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from TechOutsider

Merge the one sentence sections.