Wikipedia:Peer review/Palm Island, Queensland/archive1

Palm Island, Queensland[edit]

This island is the most beautiful with some very inte3resting history Phenss 11:41, 9 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

article is very brief. needs more information about its geography, climate, history, people. All of which needs to be sourced. At the moment it is a bare skeleton, and you've got that structured nicely, but each section needs to be expanded upon. The main thing I notice is that there are far too many images. Try to be ruthless - it's a beautiful place but one or two good images are more powerful than trying to depict everything that you appreciate about the island. Also 3 images of car bodies rusting away? I don't think even one is needed, but 3? Rossrs 13:39, 11 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

new request:
The article has obviously changed greatly since the April 2006 peer review and it has been quite a few months since the Collaboration and successful Good Article nomination. I realise that the history section needs to be summarised and moved into a new article of its own, which I'm not very good at doing, but i'd appreciate comments on other ways that the article could be improved. Cheers, Wiki Townsvillia n 01:19, 1 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 01:08, 15 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Here are some suggestions for the lead paragraph, which in all honesty is not very clear. From what I've read the main body of the article is in much better shape, but I don't have time to do more at present. If I fail to get back to this inside a week feel free to badger me.

~~'or by Aboriginal name'. Surely 'by the Aboriginal…'~~ done

~~'of about 2 000 people'. Why not '2,000'?~~ done

"Palm Island is an island, which is also known as Great Palm Island, or by Aboriginal name Bukaman[3], and it is a community of about 2 000 people, although not officially named, the settlement is called Palm Island, the Mission, Palm Island Settlement or Palm Community by default.[4]."

This is a snake and poorly syntaxed. It has two periods at the end and far too much in bold none of which is necessary. Suggest "Palm Island, also known as Great Palm Island, or by the Aboriginal name Bukaman[3], is a community of about 2,000 people. The main settlement is named variously; Palm Island, the Mission, Palm Island Settlement or Palm Community. done, with slight revision: "is a community of" changed to "is an island with a resident community of"

~~"The Island is situated" no capital 'I' required.~~ done

See WP:LEAD. This section should summarise the entire article, and have at least a sentence for each section in the TOC.

Hope that's helpful. Ben MacDui (Talk) 20:06, 22 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]