Wikipedia:Peer review/Peanuts/archive1

Peanuts

This is a cultural masterpiece of the XXth century. The main problem with the last GAC was the lack of references. Althought this has been partially adressed, it is still very far from GA level. Please help point out the assertions for which a ref is absolutely necessary. Any other comments on how to advance to GA or FA level is welcome.

Review by karanas

• I've added the {{fact}} tag in the article where I thought citations were necessary. Sorry if it seems a little tag-heavy, but the information had to have come from somewhere, or it wouldn't be in the article, right? Basically, you need at least one citation for every paragraph. You should be especial notice to citations for the literary criticism of the work or it looks too much like Original research. Also, ALL quotations must be cited.
• Citations don't need to be placed in the middle of a sentence. Instead, put all citations for that sentence at the end of the sentence.
• Per WP:MOS, single years should not be linked (1948).
• Need a better transition between Li'l Folks info an Saturday Evening Post sentence
• The second paragraph of History section doesn't flow well - seems like two small paragraphs stuck together.
• " they decided to go for " seems too informal for an encyclopedia article.
• "By the time the first Sunday strip appeared," - this could be interpreted that it refers to the first Sunday strip ever, not the first Peanuts Sunday strip
• Do not put facts in parantheses; find a way to incorporate the info into the paragraph.
• I noticed that your time magazine source has statistics on the number of people who were following the strip. You should try to incorporate that information, as well as the info on what languages it has been translated into.
• You need to edit the article for weasel words, unless they occur in very well-cited areas. Examples: "airport's amusing logo", "most popular", "memorable"
• The sole citation in Television and film productions section is not formatted properly
• Cast recordings section needs to be reworked. IT is just a collection of one-sentence paragraphs that either need to be merged into more paragraph form or removed. Can you cite those using the recording itself?
• instead of using the word "currently", say as of 2007, because if someone reads this in 2009 that may no longer be true.
• do not include external links within the text
• I think you could probably trim a lot of the info in Other licensed appearances and merchandise and possibly in the recordings section.
• Make sure all of your citations have a publisher listed.

Karanacs 16:48, 21 June 2007 (UTC)