Wikipedia:Peer review/Penitentiary of New Mexico/archive1
Penitentiary of New Mexico[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it is nearing "Good" article quality status!
Thanks, teratogen (talk) 17:36, 16 November 2013 (UTC)
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.[?]
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as WP:WIAFA critera 1(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.[?]
- As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2][?]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]
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-(t) Josve05a (c) 23:55, 22 November 2013 (UTC)
COMMENT: First, this article needs additional cites to bring it back to B Class standards. Until that happens, there is no reason to review a Start Class article for Good Article status.Georgejdorner (talk) 18:06, 29 November 2013 (UTC) FURTHER COMMENT: A quick read shows the potential for a rather tidy little though incomplete article. The graphic is stunning in its starkness. Most of the overly long lead belongs down in the main text.
Main text begins with a History section, as it should. Move lead paragraphs two through four down below this and entitle it appropriately.
Don't worry about the fact you have but a single paragraph lead at this point; leads should be the last thing written in an article, summarizing the main text. A History section and a Classification(?) section do not an article make. Research is needed to extend the article, because any itinerant reader (like me) will wonder, How does this pen fit into the legal community? our human community? Most of all, Why is this penitentiary notable?
A Google Advanced Book Search for "New Mexico Penitentiary" shows a wealth of opportunities. A tip: if these books are not available in your local library, ask about the Interlibrary Loan program. Participating libraries fetch your books from libraries nationwide for free or for a nominal fee. I am in a poor rural county, so they charge me a whopping $2.00 per book. I got a $100 paperback through my library for a 3 week loan, and hung onto $98.
Once you have a well-rounded article, fully cited, write a shrunken version of it for your lead. Then put this article up once again for Peer Review. Flag me on that, if you wish, or contact me if I can be of help.Georgejdorner (talk) 01:56, 30 November 2013 (UTC)