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Pilot (Modern Family)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I hope someday it can become a good article

Thanks, NoD'ohnuts (talk) 22:34, 22 August 2010 (UTC)NoD'ohnuts[reply]

Comments by Jappalang

Citations are not standardised, some are even bare naked urls: violation of WP:CITE.
What makes movieweb.com, dailyactor.com, and tvbythenumbers.com reliable sources? Please refer to Wikipedia:Wikipedia Signpost/2008-06-26/Dispatches and Wikipedia:Wikipedia Signpost/2008-07-28/Dispatches on the criteria that Wikipedia typically deems reliability of a source by.
Spotted several "noun + -ing" constructions that typically irks reviewers such as User:Tony1; look up User:Tony1/Noun plus -ing to see how to overcome this issue.
"Haley goes downstairs to complain to Phil, who is preparing to shoot Luke. Phil accidentally shoots Luke, Dylan, and then himself."
With a real gun?
I sort of feel the Plot section is doing a blow-by-blow narration, instead of presenting the story in a coherent sense. What is it all about? A comedy? Family drama? If it is supposed to follow three different families before coming together in a final scene, would it not be better to clump each family's experience in their own paragraph before tying everything up in a final paragraph?

I have not done a detailed look but the above stand out as big obstructions to a further review or assessment of quality. Jappalang (talk) 07:10, 29 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]