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Rose Cleveland

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know If I have included enough information on the subject. In addition this article is listed for peer review in order to expand on a assignment for a His218 assignment.

Thanks, Jscanlon66 (talk) 16:17, 12 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments - I'll review it from a technical perspective in order for it to be elevated to (say) B-class or nearer to GA status.

• Lead is way too short, please review WP:LEAD for some detail on this – it should adequately summarise the content of the article. (For example, it was news to me (a Brit) that the sister of an unmarried President is the "First Lady"..., you can expand on that, and her subsequent lesbian activities for instance).
• Use spaced en-dash, not spaced hyphen in the date range (see WP:DASH for details).
• Two dabs - episcopal and Frances Willard.
• on June 14th, 1846 -> June 14, 1846.
• Two refs for all of the biography section seems very weak.
• And isn't this all her biography? Perhaps you need an Early life section before the White House and Later life sections.
• "from the New York Times about" -> "from The New York Times about"
• "can help provide an understanding on what she believed and stood for." not really what we're here to do. This is an encyclopaedic article, not something to advocate what she did.
• "Miss Cleveland, Wore a dress " no comma needed, no W for wore.
• Works section: " a novel (1886).[1], " odd punctuation and why is that ref just there? What references the rest of the section?
• Is this really still a stub?
• Template says she was an "acting" First Lady. If so, this should be reflected in the article where "acting" isn't mentioned once.

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:51, 17 December 2011 (UTC)