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Rwandan Revolution

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I have worked on this quite a bit, and it recently had a copyedit. I think all major details of the revolution are covered, but I'm interested to know whether people think it needs expanding, and if so which areas should be covered in more detail. And any other advice people have, that might help this get through GA (I've already added it to the backlog for that), and hopefully an eventual FAC.

Thanks,  — Amakuru (talk) 17:47, 8 March 2015 (UTC)

Update: The article has now been promoted to GA, but I'm still very interested to get an in depth peer review so that I can make the necessary improvements to push through to FA. Thanks!  — Amakuru (talk) 16:35, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Nikkimaria

• Who held Naturalised identity cards?
• When was the Conseil Superieur formed?
• "The first document referring to the Tutsi and Hutu as separate races" - are we certain of this? If the Belgians were previously identifying the two as different, how could they not have had any such document?
• "at one point he grabbed Giter's throat" - Gitera?

  Yes. Fixed.  — Amakuru (talk) 16:53, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

• "Munyangaju and Gitera began a campaign targeting Kalinga" - what sort of campaign?
• "according to American professor" - who?

  Done. "according to American theology professor James Jay Carney"  — Amakuru (talk) 17:01, 17 March 2015 (UTC)

• Overall death toll? Overall damage estimate?
• Was the Church at all involved in the revolution itself?
• Where did the FPR come from? Nikkimaria (talk) 04:11, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Brigade Piron I really like this article, but I feel it could perhaps do with a slightly broader perspective. It would be good for the reader to see where the events fit within broader trends in (central) Africa during the period. Paul Nugent (Africa Since Independence) argues that it fits into a wider reaction against indirect rule and tribal structures after independence, as I recall. I think a mention of the very similar situation in neighboring Burundi (Tutsi-dominated monarchy with a predominantly Hutu population) would also be interesting - Nugent makes an explicit comparison. The Burundian monarchy took a very different stance from the Rwandan one and lasted longer, but ultimately suffered the same fate. In any case, well done on completing such an interesting article! —Brigade Piron (talk) 15:40, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

I think Cliftonian and Lemurbaby might be interested in participating here too. —Brigade Piron (talk) 15:40, 18 March 2015 (UTC)

OK, thanks for your kind comments, Brigade Piron. I will try to incorporate this wider perspective when I am expanding the article. Thanks  — Amakuru (talk) 20:46, 18 March 2015 (UTC)