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Sacred Cod of Massachusetts[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because… this is my first article I have worked on to the point where I feel it fully covers the topic. I am not very good at references so that may need a look at, and just generaly if there is anything i am missing on this topic.

Thanks, Found5dollar (talk) 14:55, 7 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Dtbohrer

"The current cod was stolen as a practical joke in 1933 by Harvard students, but was returned two days later."
- Suggest (sounds better): The cod was stolen in 1933 by students from Harvard University and was returned two days later"
"This led to a 20-minute slow-speed chase on the West Roxbury Parkway between the Harvard University Police Department and a car with no license plate"
- From reading an NYT article, it seems like the police were only following the car rather than actively chasing or pursuing. Suggest something like: "This led to the Harvard University Police following a car without a license plate on the West Roxbury Parkway."
I think that the "Holy Mackeral" section and the last paragraph from the "Symbolism" section could be merged into a section about other uses of cod in symbols and similar symbols in Massachusetts.
The "Notes" section should come before the "Bibliography" section and both should 2nd-level headings (== ==). Also a "References" section header isn't needed.
Per WP:CITESHORT, the year published should be in the footnote. "Belanger 2008, p. 149" rather than "Belanger, p. 149"
Here's the original article from the LA Times [1]
It may be easier to format the references using the template {{Citation}} or another Citation template.
A note that the members of the Lampoon abducted someone from the Harvard Crimson as a diversion. A think this should be mention in the article as well.

The also numerous small things I'd like to fix, but feel it would take too long to list, if its OK with you. I also found some articles on the "cod-napping" from the New York Times. I could e-mail them if you like. If a spot anyting else later, I'll add it here. --D.B.^{talk•contribs} 21:00, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]