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Sarah Geronimo

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am hoping to take it to GA soon. Currently, it is in class B and has gone through a copyedit, neutralization, and source formatting. Please comment anything that you think we can improve in the article. All comments will be acceptable before I nominate it.

Thanks, White paladin888 (talk) 13:01, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

Image review - All images check out. Awadewit (talk) 15:28, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Awadewit - You asked me for some further thoughts on whether or not this article is ready for GA. In my opinion, the article is missing a major section: a section on Geronimo's musical style and voice. See these articles for the kind of thing I mean: Aaliyah, Mariah Carey, and Celine Dion. The writing in the article certainly meets GA standards (there are a few awkward sentences, but these could be quickly fixed). I didn't look at all of the sources, but some of them look like they might fall into a gray area in terms of reliability (I wonder about using Geronimo's own site so much, for example). If you want me to do a full source analysis, let me know. Awadewit (talk) 15:58, 31 March 2010 (UTC)

Source review - I know very little about popular music sources, so I hope I didn't miss anything! Here is my review, though:

• In general, the notes need to more clearly identify the sources being cited - they need the names of the publications, not just the web address, for example. The reader should not have click on the link to understand what publication is being cited.
• Be sure that any non-English articles indicate what language they are in - there are language templates for that.
• Since this is a promotional website, I would not use it as a source if there are other sources available. I saw that many times you have other sources. If that is the case, I would remove this source. This is true for all of the sarahgeronimo.com sources.
• Try to source anything remotely controversial or debatable to third-party sources, rather than Geronimo's own site, such as the numbers of albums sold.
• Why is this source reliable?
• Why is this source reliable?
• This source is a reprint, is that it?

I hope this is helpful! Awadewit (talk) 03:45, 6 April 2010 (UTC)

Answer from White Paladin888 - Thank you for doing a peer review in the article. Next week or next next week, I'll start my research about "Musical Style" and "Voice" as well since I'm very busy at the moment. I'm here to answer some questions regarding the sources:

this source is reliable because, like philstar and other sources in the article, it is the website of a newspaper. But if you don't like this site, you can remove it since there are other good sources that's been used in the same sentence.=))

source is reliable because "Manila standard today" is a NEWSPAPER too. But the news/article wrote both in the said site and the newspaper as well.

This source is a reprint? Well, based from the site, it shows that it repost some articles from different sites like Philstar and Manila Bulletin. And those sites are reliable because they are newspapers.

Now, regarding her site, do you think it's unreliable? you can remove some sarahgeronimo.com sources IF THERE's other sources that has been cited in the article. But if there's no other sources except her site, well just leave it that way for now (I'll research more reliable sources next next week..)

Again, Thank you for reviewing this article, OVERALL, do you think the article is good? Of course except those things that you noticed..--White paladin888 (talk) 16:05, 6 April 2010 (UTC)

• Comments from SuperFlash101: I was asked to review this last month. My humblest apologies for not doing so until presently. Overall, I find that this article is good, but here are some aspects in need of improvement IMO:

• I'd suggest moving all of the free-use images of her to Commons.

•  Done(White paladin888 (talk) 15:35, 18 May 2010 (UTC))

• Some standalone paragraphs in "Career breakthrough" can easily be merged with others in the section as they are rather small.
• "In 2004, Geronimo signed a contract with ABS-CBN network" → "with the ABS-CBN network"

•  Done--White paladin888 (talk) 15:12, 14 April 2010 (UTC)

• Section "Concerts and movie success: 2008—present" should be renamed to "Concerts and film success: 2008—present" IMO.

•  Done--White paladin888 (talk) 15:12, 14 April 2010 (UTC)

• The caption "Sarah Geronimo's star in Walk of Fame Philippines, set in December 2009" → "Sarah Geronimo's star on the Philippines Walk of Fame, given in December 2009."

•  Done--White paladin888 (talk) 15:12, 14 April 2010 (UTC)

The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 20:34, 8 April 2010 (UTC)