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Scimitar Oryx

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I've listed this article for peer review because I thought the article is complete after i put so much effort into it. If there are still any suggestions. they are welcome.

Thanks, Sainsf <^> (talk) 07:24, 12 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead is way too short, have a look at WP:LEAD for guidance. It's intended to summarise the major topics of the article.
• "Adult in the Taronga Zoo" in the infobox, usually Taronga Zoo isn't preceded with "the".
• Before you use an abbreviation of IUCN, you should expand it.
• "its magnificent horns[3], " magnificent is your opinion, and refs should go after punctuation, not before, wherever possible. Check the rest of the article.
• Bags of over linking. To start with, we don't link individual dates or years. Next you should use sue common sense, would a reader of this article know what a "sheep" is? More than likely so there's no need to link it. You should check the rest of the article, I'll do my best to point out the clear ones.
• German would be best linked to German people rather than Germany, ditto for England, but consider, is it relevant to link these in this type of article?
• "the name leucoryx failed" how does a name "fail"?
• Two dab links, migration and roots.
• "is just over a meter" all of them? At what point in their life is that measured?
• Number ranges should use the en-dash, not the hyphen.
• "a meter to a meter and a quarter " -> 1.00 m to 1.25 m
• Don't relink things in the same paragraph (as a minimum), e.g. horns.
• The female has 4 nipples. See WP:MOSNUM, normally this would be written as "four". Check the rest of the article.
• Morning, evening, tree, shrub, all unnecessarily linked. Check the rest of the article.

That gets about half-way, there's a way to go, particularly dealing with the way-excessive linking going on. Would also consider a really good copyedit from someone who knows better than I. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:18, 17 December 2011 (UTC)