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Snuffy's Parents Get a Divorce[edit]

Fire away. This article has failed FA, then GA. Both times, I got minimal feedback of where to improve. -- Zanimum 18:20, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • For one thing, it needs, if possible, a good screenshot from the episode. And the lead section should be a 3-4 paragraph summary of the rest of the article. —Remember the dot (talk) 21:43, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Only thing is, this episode was never aired, and has never been even bootlegged and circulated among fans. Unless Sesame Workshop were to be really, really nice, this never sees the light of day.
Good point on the style, though, fixed. -- Zanimum 18:11, 2 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • The first sentence of the article really should establish what the subject is. Say something along the lines of ""Snuffy's Parents Get a Divorce" is an unaired episode of the American television show Sesame Street." After you establish what the article is about then the introduction can continue with background, ect. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Medvedenko (talkcontribs) 23:26, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Done. How's it look? -- Zanimum 18:11, 2 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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