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I've listed this article for peer review because I am particularly fond of this article and would eventually like to see it go to Featured Article status. Passed GA in January 2012 and I am interested to know generally and specifically what the weaknesses are so I can improve the article.

The Spirit Fruit Society (don't be put off by the name!) was a commune founded in 1899 and is said to be one of the most successful and longest-lived groups of its kind. I find it an interesting topic, I hope others do as well!

Thanks, Wikipelli Talk 10:49, 15 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Lead seems a little heavy, four paras for a short article, check out WP:LEAD.
  • "existed longer and more successfully than any other American utopian group.[1]" some claim. You source it to one book. Is there any other evidence that this claim is true?
 Doing... Re: the first two bullets: I've reduced the lede to 2 paras. Started a section at the end (don't like the name, though, "Success of the society" Suggestions? I'd like a 'post-mortem'-like section where the success in retrospect could be examined. Wikipelli Talk 17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • On a vaguely related note, I don't see refs in the lead in most FAs these days, they tend to expand upon the lead in the main part of the article and ref stuff there.
 Fixed I agree. I prefer not to have refs in the lede. Took them out except one since there was a direct quote. I felt uneasy taking that one out. Wikipelli Talk 17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Direct quote must be cited per WP:LEADCITE
  • Not sure soul needs to be linked.
 Fixed Unlinked Wikipelli Talk 17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Ottawa Free Trader -. 27 November 1908" odd space/hyphen combo here.
 Fixed typo Wikipelli Talk 17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Shouldn't the further reading work titles be in italics?
will check and fix Wikipelli Talk 17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed
  • "Full text at Internet Archive (archive.org)" well that's why we have archiveurl as part of our {{cite web}} template, so fix that.
Checking on that, too... Wikipelli Talk 17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for the input! I appreciate it... Wikipelli Talk 21:07, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]