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I've listed this article for peer review before nominating this for FA. The game isn't popular as it used to be, so some sources may be outdated.

Thanks, Regards, Jeromi Mikhael 13:46, 27 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

STANDARD NOTE: I have added this PR to the Template:FAC peer review sidebar to get quicker and more responses. When this PR is closed, please remove it from the list. Also, consider adding the sidebar to your userpage to help others discover pre-FAC PRs, and please review other articles in that template. Thanks! Z1720 (talk) 21:06, 7 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Jeromi Mikhael I also suggest that you review some articles at WP:FAC if you haven't already. This will help you understand the FA criteria so that you can further improve your article. It also builds goodwill among FAC regulars who will be more likely to review your article. Editors do not need to be an expert in the topic or in Wikipedia policy to review. In fact, FAC needs reviewers who are not experts to point out technical jargon and places they don't understand the prose in an article. I hope to see you there. Z1720 (talk) 21:06, 7 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Urve

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Some comments from a very quick readthrough:

  • What makes Pocket Gamer - eg this - a high-quality source?
  • Similarly for Gamezebo?
  • @Urve: Gamezebo is listed here. Check it out.
  • "with most reviews stating that the game is either better or supplementing its source of inspiration" ---> "with most reviews stating that the game is either better than or supplements its source of inspiration"
  • "One of the most popular demands was to make the game more similar to Minecraft up to its detail" - unclear
  • @Urve: I've reorganized the sentence, please check it out.
  • "He wanted to make the game into a long-term game" - redundant use of 'game'
  • "Survivalcraft 2 is a prequel" - sequel
  • critical response seems to give almost WP:UNDUE weight to the praise alone. take a look at the first paragraph and then look at the reviews that were more negative - there's some balancing that needs to happen
  • @Gerald Waldo Luis: Yes, I see. I've used all of the four review that Metacritic aggregated in the article. As you can see, the first two reviews in Metacritic were positive, so I put these on the more positive first paragraph. The mixed reviews was put in the second and third paragraph of the section. The last paragraph is for the Gamezebo review that judged this game entirely negative. If you have any more specific advice on balancing that would be really appreciated. --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael 03:58, 21 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Will return if/when have the time. Urve (talk) 04:19, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Gerald Waldo Luis

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Hey! Sorry for not GA reviewing it, but here we are. The article is relatively short (nearing 30,000bytes), so you might see significant oppositions cause apparently some people think shorties can't be FA. To try prevent that, if you have more includable information I would recommend doing so. GeraldWL 06:29, 19 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • "The game was compared to Minecraft by various reviews, with most reviews stating that the game is either better than or supplements its source of inspiration." The first half is not needed. So probably change it to "The game received polarizing reviews by video game critics, though most opined that the game is either better than or supplements its source of inspiration."
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "Windows Phone and iPad"-- link iPad
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "Survivalcraft is a 3D"-- "Survivalcraft is a three-dimensional (3D)"
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "the player generating a world" extend "world" to "open world" then link.
  • "a tree to obtain timber" link timber
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done


  • Since it also covers the release, suggest changing to "Development and release".
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "He bought a copy of the game in July 2011 after hearing rumours about the game" change the second "the game" to "it" to avoid repetition.
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "After playing the game and modifying the game's source code"-- "After playing it and modifying its source code".. also link source code
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "a rate of 4.5 frames per second" link frame rate in "rate".
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "also conducted in Survivalcraft's final"-- "also conducted in its final"
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • "Survivalcraft 2 is a sequel"-- usually I would bold the game name.
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • Italicize Survival 2 in the image caption
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done


  • For the critical response, I suggest seeing WP:RECEPTION. It's a guide used by many editors when considering FAC, and makes the section much more readable.
  • Because the ratings have been stated at the table, there's no need to state the rating in prose.
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done
  • Recommend adding {{Portal|Video games|Technology}} to the "Translation" section.
@Gerald Waldo Luis:  Done