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Tegetthoff-class battleship[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've been working on this article for a while now. I'm by far the greatest contributor to it. It's grown roughly 2-fold since I've started working on it last month. I'm hoping to eventually bring it towards FA-status, but for now, I think there's certainly potential in getting the article to A-class status. As I've just recently come back from a 5-year long wikibreak, I'm trying to get back into the swing of editing, I'd like to use this peer review to help me along the way.

Thanks, White Shadows ^{New and improved!} 02:23, 6 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead's a bit on the long side

Some of the details in the infobox don't quite line up with those in the article text, while others don't appear in the text at all

If you're hoping to head for FA, I'd encourage you to either do a comprehensive run-through for MOS issues, or possibly see if someone at GOCE could help with that.

"French Admiral Augustin Boué de Lapeyrère was issued ordered to close off Austro-Hungarian shipping" - do you mean issued orders?

Some of the entries in your References section are not cited. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:11, 9 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I've trimmed the lead a bit, though I'm hesitant to cut any more out of it at this point unless there's a consensus to do so.

I've been away from Wikipedia for half a decade before coming back, so I have to admit I'm not sure what MOS means?

Manual of Style. A-Class review generally doesn't emphasize it, but FAC does. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:12, 9 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for pointing out those infobox issues! I've corrected the mistakes there, but I'll need to check other battleship articles to see what infobox material is present in the article vs what is usually not included in the text itself.

If there are details you opt to include only in the infobox, they should be cited there. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:12, 9 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The bits about the French admiral have been corrected. That was a simple typo.

The Naval Proceedings will be used soon as a reference. The rest which aren't used as citations have been chopped out. White Shadows ^{New and improved!} 17:05, 9 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]