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Any helpful comments and/or suggestions would be greatly appreciated as I woud like to improve this article to a GA level. J.D. 20:49, 25 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Review by bcasterline

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Great movie. A few suggestions for the article:

  • The lead should summarize more of the article per WP:LEAD. The cast might deserve it's own section; in any case, the list in the intro probably doesn't belong.
  • Shorten "Synopsis" if possible, leaving out the smaller details. Also, I would avoid expressions like "massive invasion", "instantly slaughtered", etc. -- I don't think they really belong in an encyclopedia.
  • Add references for the "Style and themes" per WP:V/WP:OR.
  • Expand/cleanup "Adaptations". At the moment it reads like a list, which is kind of sloppy.
  • Expand "Criticisms" and "Responses" -- lots of information on critical acclaim/public response is usually valuable.
  • Remove the last "popular culture" section. The advice to avoid trivia sections in articles almost always applies.

Good luck. -- bcasterlinetalk