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The Truth (The X-Files)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see if promoted to Featured Article one day. It is currently a Good Article, having been promoted earlier this year. Just recently, it was copy-edited and many of the sources were bulked up. Any review comments would be greatly appreciate!

Thanks, Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:23, 6 September 2012 (UTC)

Hello there! As a fan of The X-Files I'm happy to give this one a go for you Gen Quon. It's great to see that you've put a lot of work in here and produced a good article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 14:44, 8 September 2012 (UTC)

Regarding the Introduction;

• The first sentence does not read very smoothly, primarily due to a problem with the following – "the collective name for the 201st and 202nd, as well as the final episodes". I suggest splitting this information into two separate sentences, one stating that these were the 201st and 202nd episodes, and another informing the reader that these constituted the finale to the entire series.
• "They originally aired on May 19, 2002, as part of the show's ninth season on the Fox network." Again, this is not a particularly smooth sentence. How about this as an alternative: "Both episodes aired on the Fox network on May 19, 2002, a part of the show's ninth season."
• "The episode was written by series creator" – but you have already stated that there were two episodes, so this reference to "episode" should be "episodes".
• ""The Truth" was the most watched episode of the ninth season, receiving a Nielsen rating of 7.5, attracting 7.5 percent of the available audience, being viewed by approximately 13 million viewers upon its initial broadcast." Was this the most watched episode across the globe or simply in the United States? This needs to be clarified. Furthermore, this sentence could really do with a rewrite; at the very least an "and" should go in before "being watched"...
• Specify whether David Duchovny is a character or an actor.
• "show centers on FBI special agents who work on cases linked to the paranormal, called X-Files;" Are the special agents called the "X-files" or are the cases called the "X-Files". This requires clarification.
• What are "Black helicopters" and why is the capitalization of "Black" required; indeed, why is the helicopter's colour even relevant ?
• "Carter has expressed an intent to make a third X-Files feature film that would focus on the impending alien invasion revealed in this episode, depending on the success of the 2008 film The X-Files: I Want to Believe." This final sentence seems a little dated considering that the second film has already appeared. I suggest an alternate sentence: "Carter would return to the X-Files universe with a second feature film, The X-Files: I Want to Believe (2008), and has publicly discussed the possibility of a third film, which would focus on the impending extraterrestrial invasion revealed in "The Truth".
• Why is there no image in the right hand box, like there is for "Episode 2 (Twin Peaks)" ? If you have not yet done so, I would really recommend that you look at this page, which has already achieved an FA status, for ideas on how best to format this article.

Regarding the "Plot" section:

• "the final colonization of the planet." Specify that the colonization of the Earth is to be undertaken by extraterrestrials, allied with several human forces.

Regarding the "Writing" section:

• "What was kind of nice that Chris" – is there a word missing here ?
• "respect for the elegant in which" – again, is there a missing word that should be here, because it reads as if there is ?
• If you mention Frank Spotnitz, then link to him too.
• Who is Bruce Harwood and why does his opinion on this issue at all matter ? You must mention that he is an actor on the show.
• "elements that call-back to other installments" – would "reference earlier episodes" be preferable here ?
• "In addition, the second season episode "Red Museum," featured the adherents of the Red Museum, who believed that the year 2012 will bring about the dawning of The New Age." Why is this relevant information ? How does this relate to "The Truth". With Wikipedia articles like this, you have to be very explicit so that any reader – even those who have never seen an episode of The X-Files – will understand.
• "an event that the Mayans predicted" – of course, as any Mesoamerican archaeologist will tell you, the Mayan people never really predicted that the world will end in 2012. I think we need to make clear that this "Mayan Prophecy" appears in The X-Files, but in reality is hokum.
• "have all expressed their interests in making one" – this should be "interest", singular.

Regarding the "Casting" section:

• Specify who George W. Bush is.
• Perhaps briefly explain what The West Wing is.
• "season nine DVD"; I'd add "release" to the end of this sentence, just to clarify that the entire season 9 was not found on one singular DVD disk.

Regarding the "Filming" section:

• "spent four to five days to light the set for filming"; this should be corrected to "lighting the set".
• "Manners had to shot each scene"; this should be "shoot".
• What is an ATV ? Link to it.
• "featuring The Smoking Man being burnt up by a missile" Do you mean "blown up" ? Some clarification here would be nice.

Regarding the "Themes" section:

• "has been examined" By whom ? academics, journalists ?
• "as a from" This should be "form".
• "ironic reversal of her skepticism about the paranormal". If by "her" he means Scully, this should be stated.
• "during this scene, Mulder traps Scully's gold cross," -- this needs to be clarified; "traps" how exactly ?

Regarding the "Broadcast and reception" section:

• "heavily promoted The Cosby Show reunion" - how about "heavily promoted reunion of The Cosby Show", it just reads a little better to my ear.
• ""The Truth" did, however, place ahead of the season finale of The Practice"-- Get rid of the "did, however", and convert the "place" to "placed".
• "placing The X-Files number two in the top ten broadcasts" - replace "number two" with "second".
• "Kessenich, did however, maintain that, were" -- this could be tidied up.

On the whole, you really deserve to be congratulated for your work on this article, and once these problems that I have highlighted have been cleaned up, I really think that you should be ready to head on over to FA review. All the best, Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:30, 8 September 2012 (UTC)

Thank you ever so much for your review. I believe I have cleaned up most of the issues. I think I will take this to FAR now! Once again, thank you!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:46, 8 September 2012 (UTC)