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Thrice

I've listed this article for peer review because…

I wish for the article to someday be a GA, and peer review greatly will help. What needs to be done so that the article could achieve this rank?

Thanks,

Pbroks13 (talk) 02:15, 7 December 2007 (UTC)

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Review by Dweller

• Consider moving article to a less misleading article name. Even though there's no article on the term "thrice" meaning three times, I wasn't expecting to find an article about a band.
• Could do with a third party copy-edit. Some examples from the first few parags:

"the band was known for their "powerful, driving beats and buzz-saw riffs,"[2] mainly due to the release" - does that mean that aside from that album, at that point in time the band's style was usually very different?

"showing off their musicianship by intricating music stylings such as complex time signatures" not sure about POV here, and not sure about intricate being a verb

"experimentally unique, using non-conventional Thrice elements in the process" every album is unique (unless it's an exact copy) and if it's unusual, then adding it's non-conventional is a tautology

• Lead should really summarise the article. Do you think you've achieved this? Giving charity isn't really very notable, for example. Bill Gates' giving is massively notable, but I'm not sure if I'd include it in his article, as his other achievements are so much more important.
• Very early history could do with expansion, how the band came together. The inside joke should be summarised and included.
• Really don't understand the artist in the ambulance name explanation
• Consider moving the band members section to above the history and expanding a little about the members. Yes, they've each got an article, but they're pretty important for this article too.
• Not sure if other band FAs have done this, but since this is a band that charts, it might be nice to include some chart positions in the discography.
• Nice that you've included some music clips. Their captions need some wikilinking and some caution over POV
• I have no expertise on licensing issues for music and photos, but if you're not 100% sure find an expert who'll check the clips and pix are properly labelled before you take this to GAC etc.

All in all, a nice article, well on the way to GA. Worth considering pushing it to FA. --Dweller (talk) 17:36, 19 December 2007 (UTC)