Wikipedia:Peer review/Tiësto/archive2
Tiësto[edit]
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know how the current article is, how it reads, if it is too much or too little, if it should be broken down or in any way improved. It is currently a good article and would like it to become a featured article. Any comments or suggestions are welcome on improving the article.
Thanks, ASOTMKX (talk) 14:34, 1 September 2009 (UTC)
SGGH
Ongoing. Comments soon to appear. SGGH ping! 16:06, 12 September 2009 (UTC)
- Strong lead - but "famous", could that be quantified/qualified/changed to a direct quote from a reviewer?
- Couple of two/three sentence paragraphs that could be merged.
- Not done
- File:Tiesto444.jpg, needs more detail on its source.
- The discography section, that these are headings makes the formatting a bit odd. Perhaps format the headings such as Video and Other albums with bold text rather than headings, or perhaps a table.
- Black Hole Records doesn't need to be see also'd as its linked in the article.
- I would not cite Bebo as a reliable source, even if it is his page. Tripod might be questionable too, but I don't know what consensus on it is.
- There are a few primary sources which ought to be supplemented with more secondary ones.
- Not done
- I don't know if his myspace, twitter and facebook are suitable external links, IMO.
- Some long periods without citations, particularly in the biography sections.
- Not done
- "A wax sculpture of Tiësto was placed behind a turntable where Madame Tussauds visitors can mix Tiësto's music together with the man himself and he also won an Edison music award in the Best Dance category.[38]" Two unrelated statements in one sentence? Make sure a copy edit is done, as always.
- "Dennis Waakop Reijers-Fraaij" is mentioned on the talk page as being a possible coverage gap. If this is the case, please address. If not, ignore :)
- Not done
- A general double check on all references, and a bit of a copy edit. On a couple of occasions two words are used where one will do, but its just a minor prose change.
- Not done
- Three of the images need their captions expanded to more than "tiesto in 200_" to give them some content and tie them into the article.
I hope these ideas help. FAC will grill any remaining copy edit problems. Good luck. SGGH ping! 16:19, 12 September 2009 (UTC)